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Dear God, Gods or No One
Contributed by
pebblewrestler
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Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 01:41:06 PM in AEST
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Hi everyone,
This is a poem I just wrote and I would like some feed back on it if you think you have something nice or constructive to say.
A little background: I am doing an English correspondence course that has been a hell of a lot of work. One of the last assignments was to write a poem about facing certain death; here it is.
Dear God, Gods or No One
Can you recognize my holler?
For, I had forced you to the shed;
Ive been a busy scholar,
Always in your stead.
My time is now coming,
Will you hold me in good light?
Oh, I just became becoming!
As bright as apple blight!
Do unto me as you must,
For not procuring your worthy trust.
But do not put me where I fear,
Eternal correspondence, dear oh dear!
Copyright ©
pebblewrestler
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2005-10-27 13:41:06]
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Re: Dear God, Gods or No One
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by steven_fenton1982 on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 03:19:40 PM AEST
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| Very cool, well done :D |
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Re: Dear God, Gods or No One
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by SeanMcHaney on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 06:26:39 PM AEST
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| Ha ha! I love it! That is a great poem! I almost felt the same way about corrispondence |
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Re: Dear God, Gods or No One
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by Elisabeth on
Monday, 25th September 2006 @ 02:43:12 PM AEST
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| No doubt, you did well! Thank you for sharing. |
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Re: Dear God, Gods or No One
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by DannyGirl on
Tuesday, 26th September 2006 @ 06:21:51 PM AEST
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| Very catchy, I like it though I must be having a dense moment because I'm not totoally sure what you are talking about. |
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Re: Dear God, Gods or No One
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by Uncertain_Oblivion on
Saturday, 30th September 2006 @ 04:20:23 PM AEST
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| this was cute. |
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