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Evite Par L'amour
Contributed by
Lashing_Tongue
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Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 12:36:27 PM in AEST
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-_-, Pourquoi vous me tuez tellement gentiment? -_-,
C'est un reve le plus cruel
Elle est toute que j'ai jamais voulue dans un autre etre humain
Un esprit aussi doux que la soie elle porte
Jamais la fin de la beaute a lace avec les larmes
Comme si une deesse a marche cet avion
Mes yeux mortels ne sont pas adaptes pour cette vue
Mais j'envoie mes prieres a cette deesse de toute facon
ternellement eloigne, pourtant elle se tient ainsi pres de
Je tiens mon souffle de sorte que je puisse sentir le sien sur ma peau
Chaque heure de depassement est agonie
incalculable, mon corps ne peut pas contenir cet amour
Ainsi il deborde de mon esprit devergonde
menace la paix de ma vie
Je me rappelle sa voix comme rhapsodie divin
Et son corps comme statue molle de la perfection
Comment ose je soutenez pour entendre ses soupirs doux
Writhing dans des plaisirs incalculables dans les bras d'un home
Tandis que je pleure tranquillement ecoutant leur chanson de l'amour
Seulement et saigner, priant a son
immobile Comment peut elle preferer le froid touchez de ses mains
Quand je pourrais la laisser brulant avec le mien
veut seulement l'employer pendant qu'un homme fait une femme
Mais je vous ferais ma deesse
Je la giflerai juste ainsi je peux l'embrasser loin les larmes
Et elle me pensera seulement un ami aimable
Je toucherais mes dents a sa peau douce molle
Si pour l'entendre seulement finalement crier mon nom
Je gaspille loin, ma vie passee sans signification
Peut elle voir ces cicatrices qu'elle a faites sur moi,
Elle a laisse son nom decoupe dans ma ame meme
Mais elle ne comprendra jamais, elle peut ne jamais savoir
Elle se sauverait de moi pour toujours
Je sentirais jamais encore la agonie douce d'elle embrasser
Peut-etre pendant un jour nos levres toucheront pas dans l'amitie
Si mes reclamations au tient le premier role inapercu alle par demuni
Pourquoi pouvez vous ne pas voir cela je t'aime, beau Nicollette
Je prie pour plus de votre torture douce
Puisque je n'ai unique meilleur de pleurer pour
And a very rough translation into English -_-,
Unrequited
"Why must you kill me so sweetly?"
This is a most cruel dream
Shes all I ever wanted in another human being
A mind as gentle as the silk she wears
Eternal beauty laced with tears
As if a goddess did walk his plane
My mortal eyes are not fit for this sight
But I send my prayers to this goddess anyway
Eternally distant, yet she is standing so near
I hold my breath so that I may feel hers upon my skin
Every passing hour is agony untold,
My body cannot contain this love
So it overflows from my wanton mind
It threatens the peace of my life
I remember her voice as a rhapsody divine
And her body as a soft statue of perfection
How can I bear to hear her soft sighs
Writhing in untold pleasures in the arms of a man
While I cry quietly listening to their song of love
Alone and bleeding, praying to her still
How can she prefer the cold touch of his hands
When I could leave her burning with mine
He only wants to use her as a man does a woman
But I would make her my goddess
I will slap her just so I can kiss away her tears
And she will think me only a kind friend
I would touch my teeth to her soft sweet skin
If only to hear her finally scream my name
I waste away, my life spent without meaning
Can she see these scars she made on me,
She left her name carved into my very soul
But she will never understand, she can never know
She would flee from me forever
I would never again feel the sweet agony of her embrace
Perhaps one day our lips will touch not in friendship
If my pleas to the stars have not gone unnoticed
Why can you not see that I love you, my lovely Nicollete
I beg for more of your gentle torture
Because I have no one else to cry for
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Lashing_Tongue
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Re: Evite Par L'amour
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 12:47:14 PM AEST
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Well, at least I can understand this one lol. French isn't my strong point. But amazing poem, I really enjoyed reading it. Great write, can't wait for more - in english if possible lol.
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Re: Evite Par L'amour
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by ForeverAlone on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 12:49:36 PM AEST
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Well It is a good poem, I liked the word usage, and the way it was all foretold from the beginning, Though it is all one big stanza makes it a little hard to read, maybe breaking it up in a few places to give the eyes some time to find the correct placing, wouldn't be a bad idea. The ending is bitter sweet, and the beginning is captivating, some middle parts lost some of the power that you had created, being it is so long. All in all, this poem is fairly solid.
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Re: Evite Par L'amour
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by ArsenicMyst on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 01:29:30 PM AEST
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*
you know ...
i hate repeating myself
but like i said in a comment before
about the enfant terrible ...
and to make sure there is
no mis-understanding ...
I beg for more of your gentle torture
Because I have no one else to cry for
*.¸¸.·´¨`» Arsenic
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Re: Evite Par L'amour
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by enigma on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 01:34:29 PM AEST
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...wish I knew french...it still transferred energy in english...
Thirteen plus years ago, at forty-two years of age, I found such a one and we committed ourselves to each other...then we spent the next twelve years discovering ourselves...we thought we were discovering the other person, but in fact we were discovering deficits within our own development...she didn't love her "Self," and I didn't love my "Self." We thought the other's passion could be a substitute for our inability to know and love ourselves...not so...
...at age fifty-four, it is my experience...if a poem of Love for another cannot first be warmly spoken to your "Self," it is not wise to speak it to the other...
...just a thought...
...I am indeed an,
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Re: Evite Par L'amour
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 11:11:26 PM AEST
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| All right, this was freaking cool! Good too see you can back yourself up as a writer! Can't wait to read more. |
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Re: Evite Par L'amour
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by BehindHazelEyes on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 03:42:20 AM AEST
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This was without a doubt a brilliant powerful write. . . it contains great word play which makes it allows for vivid imagery. Makes a hell of an impact!
I had no problem following the flow.. great job |
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Re: Evite Par L'amour
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 1st November 2005 @ 01:54:55 PM AEST
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I didn't know you had posted another. I'm glad I didn't miss this one. You have a strong ability to express your emotions, and sweep the reader up in your tortured words. This is a very good write Jackie. Keep it up!
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Re: Evite Par L'amour
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th December 2005 @ 05:41:13 PM AEST
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Most lovely in every scence of the word, it speaks 4 itself as though it was guiding your hand, and rueling your heart, very beautiful.
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