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Despair
Contributed by
little_things
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Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 12:03:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Nothing can distract me
stars nor city lights
ashamed alone i fear the night
reaching, struggling
to keep what's right
My Life, My love
both gone tonight.
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2005-11-04 00:03:59]
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Re: Despair
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by SeanMcHaney on
Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 12:21:22 AM AEST
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| Don't dispare, nice poem though! |
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Re: Despair
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by poisonpen00ad on
Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 01:16:14 AM AEST
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Wow, short but with such powerful emotion.
Great work.
C. |
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Re: Despair
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 02:49:35 AM AEST
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| Don't depair, GOD is always near. |
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Re: Despair
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by enigma on
Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 05:20:39 AM AEST
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...the structure was knit nicely together with the rhyming...the rhythm, iambic pentameter, kept it flowing...I liked the repitition of the 't' sound in the first two lines...the end rhymes...the repitition of the 'm' then 'l' sound in, "My life, My love..." it worked structurally...
...then of course the spirit of your poem causes each reader to fill in all the spaces between the lines with their own despairing...
...nicely done...
...I, too, have despaired...what exhausting pain...so many little lyrical poems written during chemistry or math or physics classes...
Never alone, but lonely...
Bound with chains, but free...
Standing still and yet I'm fleeing,
A world that threatens me...
The will to live is a priceless gem
Taken for granted like the sea and the wind;
But I, I have lost it in years gone by...
...those were written nearly forty years ago...at age fifty-four, I truly believe I have escaped the gravity of despair and depression...Concerta to control my ADD, Effexor to control my depression and Remeron to enhance my Effexor...the pathos of life doesn't eat into me like it did in the past...
...thanks for sharing...
ron...enigma |
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Re: Despair
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by ever1der on
Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 01:19:05 PM AEST
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| short, brilliant .. I loved it. |
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