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Shadows of Death
Contributed by
sride686
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Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 07:14:11 AM in AEST
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Inexplicable realism when did it start
Shadows of sorrow alone in my heart
Death in my grasp as I feel its cold gasp
Taking each breath as if its my last
Life is perfection within our dreams
But in the end its only hate we see
Disgust for ourselves and all of our kind
Thats why we kill as we cross each line
Life.Its not life but a living hell
A place called earth were we continue to dwell
Bitter thoughts from my bitter sins
Distaste for my life as the journey ends
A crimson love that starts to flow
To bring the end of a life we know
Feel his touch as he embraces your mind
The reapers thoughts for it is your time
Cold chills shiver up your spine
A whisper of death that feels divine
For its the end of the pain thats in your mind
Of living this life as humankind
~Steve~
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Re: Shadows of Death
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 07:23:35 AM AEST
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wow. i can totally correlate to the notions which you present (with smooth flow and rhyme).
A clever personification of death itself..something so omnipresent and ever co-existing with life. Both tangent and intangible...a concept almost unfathomable to the human mind.
i thoroughly enjoyed this piece...
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Re: Shadows of Death
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by grim6669 on
Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 09:40:12 AM AEST
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YAY....A GOOD POEM.....I LIKE IT.....I REALLY LIKE IT.......YOU'RE VERY TALENTED WITH YOUR WORK.....IT REMINDS ME OF MY OWN WORK....... I THINK YOU SHOULD CHECK OUT MINE SOON AND ME AND YOU SHOULD GET ALONG REAL WELL.........BYE BYE
*~AMBER~* |
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Re: Shadows of Death
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 01:47:33 PM AEST
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wow Steve
It must been hell being there.
awsome write
and take care
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Re: Shadows of Death
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by mrpeanut64 on
Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 04:54:33 PM AEST
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| excellent write. |
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Re: Shadows of Death
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by ChibiMiroku on
Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 11:45:45 PM AEST
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Wow. Deep. And...almost a little sad. More melancholic than anything, but I liked the different tang of the emotion.
~A crimson love that starts to flow~
Great line, and great poem! |
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Re: Shadows of Death
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by LolaWhite on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 02:45:57 PM AEST
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This one was beautifully written, the flow was amazing and the words that you write are so true to yourself and your emotions. You share the deepest of thoughts that everyone feels at one time or another, but you do it so well. Another FABULOUS write by my hubbie.
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