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I Send You a Kiss
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 03:06:28 PM in AEST
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I said I loved you---I lied
access to my heart---denied
Tried.
To peel the layers of a hardened cortex
couldn't crack the code, your brain is too simplex
Perplex.
The one who should be able to read my mind
intricate knowledge of science and psych combined
Outlined.
Your ghostly memory in chalk
hit and run, at the crosswalk
Shock.
You. With my indifferent ways
my love restores, my hatred slays
Blaze.
Your words make a lovely bonfire
display a new kind of desire
Expire.
My time with you came and went
a lousy waste of time spent
Resent.
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hauntedscorp
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 03:09:08 PM AEST
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Bitterness, and yet some small sense of ...satisfaction???
Beautiful format and style....very well felt! |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 03:36:13 PM AEST
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Scorp you caught me off guard with this one. You speak with bitterness but on the other hand you are satisified. Am I missing something here? An emotional heartfelt write.
My time with you came and went
a lousy waste of time spent
Resent.
Your heart is once again sad my friend. Chin up sweet girl, there are plenty of guys out there Scorp. Obviously he was not the right one for you. May u find someone who is worthy of ur love.
*heartfelt hugs for you*
sue
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 03:53:37 PM AEST
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Sadness, wow, I would move on, that person does not deserve your time, you are too sweet to waste on someone who does not give back. Wonderful poem, keep writing..
Raquel Leah :D |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by lostrelic on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 04:12:58 PM AEST
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well i will admit one more time as man we are not worth it.we should respect and love the women we are with.what a great write i hope you feel better!
R.M.Wilder |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 04:28:51 PM AEST
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Ooohh, it's just so filled .. with hate. But it's almost with an elegance. Gracefully written, but with that feel - resentment. I loved it lol. Wow, it's just overflowing with emotion, very explanatory, my favorite write of yours I think. Amazing, really scorp - shockingly perfect, as well as captivating, hope alls' good though. Fantastic write.
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 11:38:23 PM AEST
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Jecks sums it up very well. Yeah, what he said and powerful. Brilliant and powerful.
Tim
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 06:08:36 PM AEST
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Scorpy, this one is good. I hear ya loud and clear my friend !!
Jecks and Tim are right. Bitterness intertwined with
satisfaction, (or is it self-preservation?). I know I shouldn't
have laughed, but that one line, "your words make a lovely bonfire"
got me going! Oh how I DO relate. Wonderful write scorp! And oh,
so cleansing !!!
~B
(chin up sweet girl! The one you seek isn't ready for you yet ..... ) |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by LostAmbition on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 11:48:07 AM AEST
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Lol!! i love how u
fool the reader into
thinking they'll be
reading a nice love poem
or something! i must say
u have a unique ability to
display sarcasm! i lov it :p
the style u wrote this in is
both original & it gives it
a flow that is perfect.
way to go scorp!! |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by brew on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 04:30:45 PM AEST
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Well if they arent worthy, then they should of been told off to an extent.! Some, get what they say they ALWAYS wanted, and then run off scared.......Oh well, great write, and to the point of being hurt, yet...................You, moved on.! Thanks for sharing this post with us as well.
Brew~ |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 08:19:21 PM AEST
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| I hope you feel better after getting this off your chest,,,good write ,,,Eddy |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Alibi on
Sunday, 13th November 2005 @ 02:26:03 AM AEST
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| Gosh Scorpy this is so harsh! My dear I know you are hurting, but you can't mean this. Your love for him was real my dear, as is your pain now. I do not know why he turned you away, but he must need his head examined. You are a sweet young lady under that tough exterior. This poem has the stamp of Scorp uniqueness to it. The style is creative, and gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. Stay positive my dear, love will find you! |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 10:20:16 PM AEST
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Well, I love how you've done this, Scorpy.
The style is very unique, it really stands out, also the way it jumps about makes it very...I dunno, strict...serious, maybe. Stern.
I like this, it gets your feelings straight out, no fuss, I can tell how you're feeling straight off, and I really hope you feel better again soon.
*hugs you tons and tons*
Phil xxx
(Who is kicking men for you) |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Jyssvw on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 12:30:05 PM AEST
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As usual you words are powerful, and the form in which you present them add to the intensity.
Great job here |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 12:47:02 PM AEST
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I like your format on this one, it is unique and makes the message more powerful. It's title is interesting, but I can't help myself: I keep reading it as "Kiss My ***! :)
Very clever write, Scorp
Will
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 01:43:08 PM AEST
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amazing write scorpy girl
I hope your doing better after writing this. |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by Jazzy on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 05:16:14 PM AEST
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| wow this poem is good on so many levels...pain mixed with alot of strength,or so thats how i see it ... no 1 way to describe anyones art..keep it up |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 1st June 2014 @ 02:06:51 PM AEST
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ha! there's that bite! i really love how you wrote this,
with the chance of being lame:::you go girl!
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: I Send You a Kiss
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by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 19th December 2016 @ 05:12:38 PM AEST
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Wonderful write.....
James |
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