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A sad life, a reachable reliance
Contributed by
desolated_denial
on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 01:16:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Poke holes
Time fell
Watery depths
of a fallen hell.
Reminisce
Hold on tight
Never thought
it could end this night
For a thousand years
in one yearly day
All you could
Start to pray
Sickled cast
of an unwanted thought
This doesn't make sense
Why can't I stop.
A poster child
Of demented love
nothing more
A sweet, poison filled glove.
A wise one said,
Nevermore
But then it died
Goobye lenore
Intelligence decays
The stage lights dim
All alone,
Alone with him.
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2005-11-11 13:16:48]
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Re: A sad life, a reachable reliance
(User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 08:28:38 PM AEST
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| nice allusion to poes poem. an excellent title. i liked your style and rhythm most in this. i think that the choppy sentence fragments worked for this piece. you had some very good rhymes and concepts woven in this. |
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