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i need to sleep
Contributed by
lostrelic
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Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 10:00:37 PM in AEST
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like a rain drop i was meant to fall
but thats what you get when you build a big wall
i try to tear it down brick by brick
but the view i start to see makes me sick
way to much flash in the pan
to much shaking of my hand
dancing with ghosts that fill in my dreams
covering my mouth so i can not scream
atleast it better that what i use to have
seeing dead all looking so glad
but i am tired my eyes are all red
i am going to sleep mabey wake up dead
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Re: i need to sleep
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 11:16:36 PM AEST
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Gosh, Regan, this was a truly sad poem. Just dripping
with melancholy and anguish. Extremely emotive. I
always love a poem that can stir and move me ... even
a despairing piece like this. You certainly accomplished
that.
"dancing with ghosts that fill in my dreams
covering my mouth so i can not scream"
yeah .... loved that !
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Re: i need to sleep
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 12:46:05 AM AEST
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Wow this was a sad poem!! but I loved it..
I like the part where you said covering my
mouth so i can not scream!!^_^ |
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Re: i need to sleep
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 05:12:11 PM AEST
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Like a raindrop you were meant to fall..
Dont give up hope
PFR |
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Re: i need to sleep
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by brew on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 05:42:22 PM AEST
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HOPE
FAITH
LOVE
Maybe this will twirl, your way.! Saddness, from the tired one.! Sleep can help some, yet YOU need to be the one to help.!
Brew~ |
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Re: i need to sleep
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by Loende on
Saturday, 19th November 2005 @ 02:35:32 AM AEST
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Oh, my friend, I feel you. Sleep is a demon and a lifesaver, though we can't predict which at any time. Close your eyes and try though, you'll come through. Great write.
Be well,
Loende |
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Re: i need to sleep
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 03:16:19 AM AEST
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Grrrrrrr! I want to shake people that post in all lowercase...your words and thoughts deserve better!! This is a good poem, saying alot in so few words. Emotive and insightful in a way too...Keep up the writes, but don't be afraid of capital letters!!
Scorp: )
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