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Learning Departure
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
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Saturday, 19th November 2005 @ 03:21:15 PM in AEST
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Its so late in coming.
Secret for the ear:
your copper breath; harsh as waves
pearl-hid in that shell,
--crashontheshore caught and pinned--
spined, worn to a finish
[that burnished intake: twist of air
thick with sand],
you roar.
Salinity, a philosophical
question,
draws you out to swollen seas.
Shell carries your breath.
Learning to breathe on my
own, I say,
float, darling.
You do. Out and out and
out.
Fade, smaller smaller,
into the swells.
I wave, and
embrace the shore.
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2005-11-19 15:21:15]
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Re: Learning Departure
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 12:54:57 AM AEST
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This caught me like it were ocean surf. The sea-imagery does so much for this, I think, just because the sea is so, so powerful. The sea embodies things like farewells, and distance. And of course, I am just enamored of sea-poetry on the whole, heheh.
But this, with its crystal-clear lines, brings such extra power into the theme. It's beautiful. Terribly so.
One of my favorites of yours, beyond any doubt.
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Re: Learning Departure
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 05:55:29 AM AEST
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Nora, this was such a brilliant write. It still amazes me that your only 15 you are so gifted and smart. It really is rare to see a girl like you.
This poem just grabs you like the open sea. It truly does feel refreshing to read your work.
Jane ~
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Re: Learning Departure
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by faith_my_eyes on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 06:12:08 AM AEST
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Congratulations-- you are offically a master of abstract poetry.
Hugs,
Em |
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Re: Learning Departure
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by Dri on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 06:31:08 PM AEST
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| ah, the poetry of the wounded, restored... |
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Re: Learning Departure
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by Cancer on
Wednesday, 1st February 2006 @ 12:30:15 AM AEST
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i like it. but probably not for the reasons i should. the second stanza actually made me smile, though i imagine i interpreted it differently than you meant it. regardless, UFYPMOTGF.
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Re: Learning Departure
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by Kayden on
Tuesday, 21st February 2006 @ 04:51:15 PM AEST
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| Wow incredible... Wrighting is definetly your gift... Keep it up and dont give it up... For there are few as good as you... =) |
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Re: Learning Departure
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by Eve on
Monday, 31st July 2006 @ 08:02:53 PM AEST
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And, with all the time you give me in between WRITING THINGS
er
writing things =)
I've drawn more meanings out of this than I ever did before. Which is good and bad.
Bad because you need to write because it's been too long. Missy.
Missy.
And don't bring me up either. This has nothing to do with me.
Yours truly,
Gerty o' the high seas. |
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