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(Un)Natural Calm
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
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Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 05:04:51 PM in AEST
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Lavender-lilac clouds, not grey
Translucent, glorious, golden sunlight
Deeply warm grey asphalt
Mucky tan dust on the car
Increasingly fading blue of the sky
And the cool comfort evergreen of the trees
In a blended contrast of stark harmony
Just as that of the choirs chorus
Reverberating deep within each singers depths
Attacking the vocal chords
Fitting so well that it fights
All the while I feel at ease
Relaxed
I can walk for miles without the cold
I can stare for ages without a blink
I can lie for hours on the frosted, dying grass
Because I am calm and serene
And so is all the world today
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Re: (Un)Natural Calm
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 05:37:33 PM AEST
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Chelsea, you know how much I like this, when you first showed it me I loved it, and I still do.
I think those last five lines sum this poem up perfectly. They are the lines that make this poem wonderful, for me.
A lovely write, sweetie, I am glad to see that you are feeling better.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: (Un)Natural Calm
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by Shnannon on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 05:44:39 PM AEST
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Wow! Awesome imagery. I've been searching for this feeling for a very long time...
Keep up the great work! |
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Re: (Un)Natural Calm
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 05:47:10 PM AEST
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The imagery u cast onto ur reader is sensational. A very well written piece of poetry.
I can walk for miles without the cold
I can stare for ages without a blink
I can lie for hours on the frosted, dying grass
Because I am calm and serene
And so is all the world today
Absolutely awesome. Well done.
*hugs*
~sue~
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Re: (Un)Natural Calm
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by Whisper on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 07:03:51 PM AEST
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:-) Nice write Good word usage .
Thanks for sharing.
Whisper |
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Re: (Un)Natural Calm
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 08:46:18 PM AEST
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Vividly painted pictures, these lines. Rather beautiful, indeed.
Nicely done, my friend.
Andrew |
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Re: (Un)Natural Calm
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by Skye on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 10:27:03 PM AEST
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| i love days like that! really good poem. nice job. |
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Re: (Un)Natural Calm
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 07:57:56 AM AEST
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Chels, this was so beautiful, it really is.
I agree with everyone, the ending just gave this poem a wonderful feeling to it.
I love this and i could just read it over and over again.
Hungs and Love,
Jane~ |
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Re: (Un)Natural Calm
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 29th November 2005 @ 07:36:52 AM AEST
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I like it. I could stand for a few of those days. Glad to see your spirit's up.
Take care.
David |
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