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The Winner
Contributed by
Fernanda_F_Rocha
on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 05:11:52 AM in AEST
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You discovered the secret
You pressed the exact button
You are happy
You were discovered
You freed yourself
You smile victorious
You dominate the situations
Restraining
You don't make speculations
You speculate yourself
You don't give Yourself up
You attract
The world is yours
You know to handle it
You demand
With an exact softness
And you win
Your sudden ones flatter you
You fill the arrogant chest
Nobody dares to challenge you
You have the seized sword
You make Yourself being applaud
You are a winner
By Fernanda F. Rocha
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Fernanda_F_Rocha
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2005-11-23 05:11:52]
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Re: The Winner
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by enigma on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 07:50:06 AM AEST
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My! What an uplifting creation...favorite lines...let's see:
You discovered the secret
You pressed the exact button
You were discovered
You freed yourself
You smile victorious
You demand
With an exact softness
...I probably embarrass you to death, but I just love your poetry...I trust your poetry...I've never been disappointed...not once...
...my stuff is either old or best describe by the line in this poem, "You have the seized sword." I guess you could call it war poetry...explosive...full of angst...dichotomous...enigmatic...off the wall and all over the country-side...not very predictable...which is my life at present...and yet, as is expressed in your poem, I am "happy," I "smile," I practice "restraint," "the world is 'mine'" and I am very much "a winner..."
My most favorite phrase is, "You demand with an exact softness." It sounds like an oxymoron, two opposite truths...gently insist unequivocally...a soft hammer...no if, ands, or buts, please..."with an exact softness..." the words flow effortlessly...
...once again, a magnificent expression from the pen of a tremendously talented lady...moon...Ladymoon...you...
ron...enigma |
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Re: The Winner
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by Fernanda_F_Rocha on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 08:42:40 AM AEST
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You dont embarrass me at all enigma :) I feel honered with your analyses.
Thank You very much :)
Fernanda
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Re: The Winner
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by Karazoul on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 06:08:52 PM AEST
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| Wow. This is beautiful! I love it! |
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