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No more
Contributed by
PeachesJon
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Saturday, 26th November 2005 @ 06:31:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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How about no more?
no more hurt feelings
being hurt by family
by friends or by lovers and wanna be lovers
just no more
How bout no more tears?
no more salted tears running
from my face unto my breast
no more Acid tears preventing
from sleeping at night
No more restless nights
No more colorless walls
No more salted nor acid tears
How bout no more pain?
being cause by any and everything
by your words
which your words can always put me to shame
no more pain from you
How bout dreams?
no more dreams of death
overseeing everyone of my steps
breathing in life and exhaling death
all at the same time
That's when I stop crying
and start dreaming
dreaming of life
dreaming of peace
dreaming of love
How about being in love?
being love by you and only you
So I guess there's no more
just plenty of love
especially being in love with you
Copyright ©
PeachesJon
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2005-11-26 18:31:31]
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Re: No more
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 26th November 2005 @ 07:30:55 PM AEST
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wow... intertesting write.... and i agree with most of it... lol. but great write. i liked it and it makes a lot of sense.... nice write. and the ending is a sharp twist in the write, but i liked it! nice write, keep it up!!
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Re: No more
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by AmyLee4Ever on
Saturday, 26th November 2005 @ 08:11:22 PM AEST
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My favorite line... absolutely favorite... it is this...
No more colorless walls
It's like everywhere you look is grey... there is no life in anything.
I also loved the ending... because it kind of goes of track... but in a good way. You talk of things you don't want, and things that bother you... and then you get to the end of loving someone else. You ar in this dreamy trance type thing. I dunno... I can't explain it all too well, but I do love this write... and I do agree with it too...
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