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Devil, My Devil
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Monday, 5th December 2005 @ 07:03:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I have seen you in the night
when the moon refuses light
when the stars grow dim and cold
in the darkness, I behold
as a ghost, a spirit haunting
eyes aglow with evil taunting
hiding, staying out of sight
but I have seen you in the night
I have heard your voice of woe
tempting sounds that rhyme and flow
spoken by a tempest sea
no-one hears the words but me
Raging with a constant beating
waves of doom that keep repeating
camouflaged, so none will know
but I have heard your voice of woe
I have felt your devil's touches
trembled in your deadly clutches
sensed your presence, you are near
dumbstruck, paralyzed with fear
Others, fools, they do not feel
hear nor see...
but you ARE real
not a demon self confined
to a mad and tortured mind
L. Carling C2005
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
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2005-12-05 19:03:14]
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by n2dep2care on
Monday, 5th December 2005 @ 07:26:15 PM AEST
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How personal a poem, very brave of you to share it with us. Very haunting, beautiful and identifying. Your emotional flow is breath taking.
“but you ARE real
not a demon self confined
to a mad and tortured mind”
. . .powerful line. Well done and Bravo!
Laurie |
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by justme03 on
Monday, 5th December 2005 @ 07:31:21 PM AEST
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WOW! Hauntingly satisfying! LOVE it!! :D
5 from me
I'd give it a big fat 10 if I could |
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 5th December 2005 @ 09:23:39 PM AEST
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Larry a very deep emotional write detailing ones struggle within himself. I commend you for writing your utmost inner feelings.
but you ARE real
not a demon self confined
to a mad and tortured mind
A thought provoking write. You can always produce an outstanding write time and time again. Hats off to you my friend.
May sorrow be cleansed from ur heart and may ur days ahead be much brighter dearest Larry.
*heartfelt hugs for you*
~sue~ |
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Monday, 5th December 2005 @ 10:48:27 PM AEST
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Great job, especially towards the ending.
Brandin |
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 5th December 2005 @ 11:20:19 PM AEST
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Larry!!!! This is OUTSTANDING!!!! You've grabbed hold of the magic and set it down here on the page! My how you have!
I'm inclined to think this would be a rather good inclusion in "How To Be A Poet 101" (only... such things really can't be taught, can they?)
I'm absolutely overjoyed for you. This is most certainly something to be proud of!
Finding this incredibly potent,
~Snemmy
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 6th December 2005 @ 01:45:18 PM AEST
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I have returned here at least three times today Larry, and read this twice last night.
I will say this ... you and I may occasionally debate form, or word choice ... but I am never disappointed when I read from you. I can always find an even rhythm. You write in a comfortable manner that I find myself continually falling into. I never have to stop and review a hiccup ... I find depth and relatability in much of what you pen. And there is no exception here.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 6th December 2005 @ 04:06:44 PM AEST
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Hmm good poem my dear Larry I didn't get
the end at first but after reading it one or two
more times I finally did. So yeah rad poem my
friend I loved it. I liked the first stanza
especially.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 6th December 2005 @ 09:09:04 PM AEST
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This is a powerful poem depicting a lot of inner turmoil and struggle. The picture you paint with your words is vivid and you include great imagery. I am sorry for your inner struggle; but it was beautifully portrayed my friend.
Great write Larry
Will |
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 7th December 2005 @ 03:53:10 PM AEST
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very honest and deep and as always a master from the king himself
throws rose petals allover Larry
hugs
Michelle |
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by sweetangeluk on
Wednesday, 7th December 2005 @ 04:21:53 PM AEST
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From one wee devil to another this was outstanding. I have not seen any more posted on you know where Larry hope to see some soon.
Roses for you friend
Loves Angelxxxx |
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by Spike on
Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 06:54:26 AM AEST
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A poem to the ambiguous muse, maybe?
I have seen you in the night
when the moon refuses light
Love it, just love it!
Spike
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Re: Devil, My Devil
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by sweetangeluk on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 10:55:00 AM AEST
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I have felt it |Larry just now whilst reading your fine perfect write. What a beautiful evening I have had reading your words of love
Thank you Mr rose man
It is so nice to be back home with you lol
Love Angelxx |
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