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Your Final Curtain
Contributed by
reecy
on
Tuesday, 6th December 2005 @ 12:57:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I sat and watched dirty tears roll from your eyes,
I heard your soul cry too
Youd clung on to broken words
For so long
Then let go
And watched all you knew fall helplessly away from you
Sunken in to sorrow and surrounded by your grief
The world had got you spinning
Grinding bones and teeth
And shallows joys were left behind
The world a treacherous place
Your ocean was dry
A vacant spirit in a worn out case
Your voice covered in cobwebs
Seldom put to use
Pupils dilated
Your face empty and vast
No longer protected
By a porcelain mask
The light bulb had blown and never been replaced
Like a gust of wind that left in haste
Batteries were dead
Your body immobile,
Just thoughts in your head
I took just one look to say my goodbye
I knew you were ready
As I cast you with my eye
Take flight like an angel and fly with the birds
Your spirit is beautiful although your wings were hurt
I saw your pain and felt you fight
You didnt give up
God gave you his light
Copyright ©
reecy
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2005-12-06 12:57:52]
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Re: Your Final Curtain
(User Rating: 1 )
by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 6th December 2005 @ 02:17:39 PM AEST
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Wonderfully written! It felt slow and difficult to read at first, but it sooned picked up momentum...quickly becoming a favourite of mine.
My fave lines had to be:
Pupils dilated
Your face empty and vast
No longer protected
By a porcelain mask
The light bulb had blown and never been replaced
Like a gust of wind that left in haste
Batteries were dead
Your body immobile
It struck a chord with me... I honestly wish i had
written it myself
Keep up the excellent writing. |
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