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Madness Prevails
Contributed by
punkhead13
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Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 08:02:08 PM in AEST
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One Two fredy's comeing for you
Three Four better lock your door
Five Six go grab your crusifix
seven eight gotta stay up late
nine ten never sleep again
Freddy, the man without a mask
he makes the sand man seem like an ask
any one to stop this man
this story ends where it began
born on Elm street
died of fire
stuck in your nightmares
his only desire
forced from the crypt
from the only threshold in your mind
where the darkness never ends
he is shortly confind
slipping under
to the unconsciouse relm
no need for sadation
welcome to Elm
Welcom to elm
where the children sleep
welcome to Elm
where insanity reaps
The darnk side of the rainbow
where the rain fills the streets
is any of this real?
or is it fantisy?
scream all you want
no one will hear
you can run you can hide
but not from your fear
holy water and prayer
will onlyhelp you fail
burn him to the ground
don't let him prevail
slipping under
to the unconsciouse realm
no need for sadation
welcome to elm
welcome to elm
where the children sleep
welcome to elm
where insanity reaps
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2005-12-09 20:02:08]
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Re: Madness Prevails
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 08:25:29 PM AEST
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I hope I'm the one dreaming and someone really did not just write a poem about Nightmare on Elm Street.
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Re: Madness Prevails
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by outlaw_mutiny on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 08:34:30 PM AEST
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nice poem
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Re: Madness Prevails
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 09:52:56 PM AEST
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| this isnt dark. the line breaks are too distracting and make this song seem less together. this obviously didnt have a lot of work put into it typing wise, because of the number of errors, and that is disappointing to a reader when they read something not even worked on hardly enough. i think you have some great rhythm working through this, but some of this is too redundant, and should use the repeat signs instead of drawing out the lyrics. some of your rhymes are too forced and most songs do not use the stereotypical lyrics (rhyme, rhythm, and repetition) to this extent, because it limits originality. there needs to be some moderation of those things for it to look good on paper, but it is a song so looking good on paper isnt exactly the point. but its all thats there at the moment. |
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