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Invitation to a Funeral
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Friday, 16th December 2005 @ 03:20:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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'Morning breaks, yet nightfall looms
The cycle remains complete
Cradles now, tomorrow tombs
...Life, death, repeat'
These words I speak, as but a wisp
While I cogitate my action
A godless prayer slips through my lips
Crave eternal satisfaction
By moonbeam's glare the room's alight
Curtains flair in noctilucence
A striking frame sleeps soft tonight
Love embodied by her presence
Beauty flees as time elapses
Endless chronological curse
Seconds pass, one's life collapses
The molecules slowly disperse
Enshrined upon my starboard wall
My inspiration lies in wait
A butterfly, encased, enthralls
Those tinctured wings I imitate
Once more I gaze her pulchritude
The bearer of ardour's mystique
Her perfect pallor, lily-hued
Enraptured by bestilled physique
'And there she lay, respiring not
From now and forth in onyx labyrinth
By my own hand, no cure is saught
Her silence brought by venomed absinthe
Preservation my motivation
Breathstealing sight, evermore's repose
Mem'ries without variegation
My inspiration for scores of prose'
A work of art born of cathect
Awe struck I stand; a spectator
My path and God's won't intersect
I am forever's creator
'So wrought with guilt, I am haunted
Try to banish surging remorse
Yet deep down it's what she wanted
Any price to halt aging's course
With wine of peridot imbibed
By dying hand my words are scribed...'
...So she's given over, a spark of fuel for the Soul Generator.
An equitable trade, for there exists no poison more virulent
than that of a fading love. In this universe of limitless variables,
there remains but one constant;
Only death is forever.
Copyright ©
Vitreous_Soul
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2005-12-16 03:20:56]
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Re: Invitation to a Funeral
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by jdawg on
Friday, 16th December 2005 @ 05:02:09 AM AEST
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I love the choice of words. trully a great write.. i don't know what to say but really good.. keep up the great work..
~Justin L.~ |
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Re: Invitation to a Funeral
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th December 2005 @ 06:55:34 AM AEST
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This is definitely a brilliant write. Powerfully dark demise.
Awesome write!
Thanks,
Tim
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Re: Invitation to a Funeral
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th December 2005 @ 07:00:12 AM AEST
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Hmnn. Well, from the first couple of reads, your rhythm has improved since the last series of submissions; but as far as the technicalities are concerned, I'll need to give it over until the weekend or I attempt a scansion ~ let it sink in, for there are parts I'm definitely not sure about (labyrinthe/absinthe) and others i'm smiling at (evermore's repose/scores of prose). It reads like a good storyline, though I need to absorb and understand it fully in time.
N_F |
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Re: Invitation to a Funeral
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by Shmokin on
Friday, 16th December 2005 @ 09:11:31 AM AEST
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| Stirrin read, thanx for sharin :-) |
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Re: Invitation to a Funeral
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th December 2005 @ 10:32:48 AM AEST
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Well now!! welcome back!
I can see I am going top have to reread this to absorb it all. My first impressions though are of a haunting darkness that eminates from this piece.
Careful of over modification ( one of my own faults) but I love the originality of the verses and the finality of the ending.
Your writing has definately been missed here!!! Glad to have you back! |
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Re: Invitation to a Funeral
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Saturday, 17th December 2005 @ 01:57:18 AM AEST
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| nice poem. |
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Re: Invitation to a Funeral
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 09:39:56 PM AEST
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One hell of a way to mark your return, Dan! Excellent!
This reminds me why I often venture to your page --- there is always something intellectual and emotional to be found... something that echoes the classics, yet remains decidedly fresh and perfectly your own. This particular piece... tugs at me... and tugs hard (in the same way, actually, that Curtain Call did).
If I haven't already said as much, I'm beyond delighted to know you were writing while away!
~Snemmy
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Re: Invitation to a Funeral
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by slayer_015 on
Tuesday, 10th January 2006 @ 01:19:36 AM AEST
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Beautiful as always my friend,simply beautiful.
Brian |
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