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My threat
Contributed by
crow6279
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Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 02:59:04 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Real life is the real threat...
but what if dreams are my reality
The way I live my life...
oblivious...never seeing
Eyes open or closed...
it matters not
Am I that untouchable...
or can I not feel
Enlightenment is darkening...
the clouds contain only rain
Footsteps gaining ever more...
down into the depths
This abyss where I dwell...
pain rolling in
A cacaphony of dread...
am I still dreaming
Walking alone by choice...
my hand reaches for more
Grasping for direction...
my real threat is me
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Re: My threat
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by ebooibo on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 03:26:20 AM AEST
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| WOW THIS IS HOW I FEEL RIGHT ABOUT NOW WOW I GOTTA READY MORE |
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Re: My threat
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by tiggytom on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 05:31:36 AM AEST
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Only you can harm you, I enjoyed this
well done
Tom :) |
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Re: My threat
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by EverlastingDawn on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 05:46:44 AM AEST
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Very interesting concept
Good imagery and flow
Your words are very creative
Wonderful Write
~Dawn |
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Re: My threat
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by Shmokin on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 07:29:00 AM AEST
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| good write,, captures the depths :-) |
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Re: My threat
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 10:51:20 AM AEST
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| This is a very emotional write with its last stanza being my favorite. I believe the thought you put into this is excellent. |
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Re: My threat
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by shelby on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 03:41:33 PM AEST
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beautiful
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Re: My threat
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 03:57:00 PM AEST
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A deep and well defined piece of poetry u have presented us with.
Walking alone by choice...
my hand reaches for more
Grasping for direction...
my real threat is me
Well done on a very well penned and expressed write.
*hugs*
~sue~ |
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Re: My threat
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by fake_emptyness on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 08:52:55 PM AEST
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| i just,...this one left me speechless....i just. damn its so well thought, put together, so........true.:| |
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Re: My threat
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by NoSaint on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 08:59:01 PM AEST
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well written and honest how hard to face our inner demons
NoSaint |
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Re: My threat
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 11:30:08 AM AEST
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I can relate.. I feel this day after day.. great poem..
christina |
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Re: My threat
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by EmoDCgirl36 on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 01:27:51 PM AEST
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| I feel like that 24/7 man. It's called the real life even though it looks like a nightmare. We just gotta get through it one second at a time. |
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Re: My threat
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 05:48:31 PM AEST
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THAT is a powerful ending. I love the ending, it made it perfect.
Take care, post many more.
David |
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