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Pulled by strings....
Contributed by
In_a_While
on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 04:03:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I promised once to see it through
but all my heartaches in me grew
I need the line to draw me close
to death i dare with one more dose
I hate my candy coated hand
it leads me where i can't command
I'm pulled by strings below my sight
to where i'm left with no warm light
Help me end my straw's descent
no one knows how far it went...
I spilled myself into this well
so you can see what i can't tell
All the echoes seem to be
people who were once with me...
and now???
I pray for skies
of clear decision
No more clouds
to darken vision
Just a sun
to see you smile...
dw
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Re: Pulled by strings....
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 04:19:54 PM AEST
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Oh Dwayne my heart cries a river of tears for you my friend. I have faith in u my friend. It'll take time, but I know u can overcome this. You are not alone dw, you have friends here who care for you.
I pray for skies
of clear decision
No more clouds
to darken vision
Just a sun
to see you smile...
May God guide ur heart my dear friend. May He shine His light upon you and lead you on the right path. My heart and prayers are with u always.
*heartfelt hugs to a very dear and special friend, dw*
~sue~ |
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Re: Pulled by strings....
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by CaseyRedman on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 06:09:29 PM AEST
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good write
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Re: Pulled by strings....
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by Jackee_line on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 07:18:59 PM AEST
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| Beautifully written with perfect flow, a joy to read. |
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Re: Pulled by strings....
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by Jen54 on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 07:30:49 PM AEST
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what a wonderful poem. I like it a lot. Keep it up.
-Jen |
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Re: Pulled by strings....
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by weepingprophet on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 02:36:40 AM AEST
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to begin in digesting such a substantial write. I would pray as well but fear that I am not worthy to bow my head in reverance to anything but hurt. It seems as though you have enough indecision for an entire universe to drown itself in. You do realize your power in this matter, clouds to darken your vision and are you not the god of your own horizon, you maintain your own skies and do not forget. What excuses we shall so easily embrace if it means to be pardoned from our own allowance of echoed relationships and a straw descent.
all the power of the sun and the impaired vision of indecision is behind this write in full support-through pain we ignite passion and you have succesfully dw.
~i caught the tear in her eye, turned away to forget her~weepingprophet |
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Re: Pulled by strings....
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 02:31:41 PM AEST
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this was really good... I liked it and the flow was excellant.. It was deep and heartfelt..
christina |
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Re: Pulled by strings....
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by troubled on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 03:06:25 PM AEST
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| Brilliant |
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