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A Very Different Year
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Sunday, 1st January 2006 @ 08:30:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
Nostalgic
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What if a demon were to creep after you one night, in your loneliest loneliness, and say, 'This life which you live must be lived by you once again and innumerable times more; and every pain and joy and thought and sigh must come again to you, all in the same sequence. The eternal hourglass will again and again be turned and you with it, dust of the dust!' Would you throw yourself down and gnash your teeth and curse that demon? Or would you answer, 'Never have I heard anything more divine'?
~ Friedrich Nietzsche
Well, for me... the demon arrives annually.... 'round about midnight, New Year's Eve. We twist and turn and spin in a bizarre dance - looking back, looking forward, holding on... and sometimes flailing out of control. We dance until exhaustion takes us--- and some mad, mad part of me wouldn't have it any other way. The demon though.... well.... he probably thinks I'm a pain in the tail!
(Ah... doncha jus' love nostalgic moments?!?)
Anyway...
This year - the dance went something like this...
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~
............. It came, blue tinted,
..On a snowflakes back
....... To taunt, to tease
.............Its familiar, long fingers
..Clawing at me,
....... Saying
..Here..............is the end
.............Again
....... It seemed, this Time,
..More urgent, needful,
...............Somehow even
.............more
..Necessary
........................But..... I
.............Could only
..............................whisper
..Please...
.............................Stop.
..........It was too much
..........And too little
..........And not enough
..........And..... more..... than..... I
..............................Could have imagined
..Though
..........It wasnt even
..Mine,
........................This
..........Time
................That held me
............in its grasp,
.......That
..I held then..... in my hands.
..And I loved it
................Even
........................As it continued
................To s...h...r...e...d me.
..We stood there,
..................we two
............ Without trappings,
.......absent words
................Staring at each other
..................... In a macabre
..tug-of-war
................Of .........will.
................I, unable
..To let go
................And
................It
................Wondering
................What
........................To
.....................................Do
..With
................That.
..I think
....... It somehow understood
................That
..I ....... just ..... needed
................A little more
.......time;
................It was
..After all
........................A very
..........Different
.........................................Year.
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by SocialMisfit on
Monday, 2nd January 2006 @ 02:57:55 AM AEST
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you my good sir are amazing, this is a very powerfull , i am deeply impressed by this write.
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by freckle on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 09:57:48 PM AEST
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Snemmerdoodle,
What a wonderful tribute to this newest of years! I really enjoyed the personality conveyed about the "new year". A great write Snem, I've read it several times. I wish to you, the best of years in this new one!
Carol |
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Friday, 6th January 2006 @ 02:32:50 PM AEST
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| wow very nice poem!!!! |
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 7th January 2006 @ 09:06:14 PM AEST
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| What a great presentation. This was more than the sum of its parts, and I'm glad you didn't relegate it to the usual structure we see in most every poem. There was emphasis and drama throughout this piece and it made it so captivating. Nietzsche had a way about him, and the things he said just made you think. It was nice of him to spark such a magnificent poem in you : ) Excellent beginning, middle, and (most importantly) end. Superb |
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th January 2006 @ 09:08:17 PM AEST
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What an intelligent,absorbing piece of writing this is and how nice to experience a year that you are reluctant to let go.
As for Nietzsche...Even the most blissful of lives would be unbearable if lived over and over again,with the knowledge of what was to come.Though wouldn't it be nice to go back, here and there, on selected days?
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 22nd January 2006 @ 12:34:43 PM AEST
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Such a unique and creative write. It really enhances the effectiveness of your write. The pattern seems to reflect hanging on and letting go. The whole issue of when to let go and when to hang on. Your poem branches out.....pun intended. :) I hope you climb effectively into the next year.
Well done, SNM
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd January 2006 @ 01:26:33 PM AEST
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You've surpassed yourself! and definitely achieved your goal, the entire layout adds emphasis to your words.
Very impressive work i've read this 3 times now and I'm almost speechless (well not quite need a lot to shut me up!)
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 10:55:37 PM AEST
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I'm blown away...
..and although your brilliant composition here does not illude to the very eerie and somewhat 'familiar'
flow.. it all comes together as majestic and VERY poetic.. raw.
I'll will re-read this again and again..
..wow-
B
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 31st January 2006 @ 07:08:34 PM AEST
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I'm in awe. This is a phenomenal masterpiece so perfectly penned. May your pen always flow with such beautiful poetic verses. Hats off to u.
*warm hugs*
~*~sue~*~ |
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 3rd February 2006 @ 06:35:32 AM AEST
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How very very interesting. Even w/o the special formatting (which I seem to remember you discussing) it is oh so obvious how complex your mind is and what a gifted and talented poet you are.
Thank you for sharing your gift.
Tim
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 4th February 2006 @ 12:08:30 AM AEST
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Alright, alright!
If my comments seem a little well out of sync it is because I am so damn impressed with this that I simply do not know if the proper words are in my vocabulary. I'll give it a shot, however.
First of all the presentation of this piece in itself is a work of art, and an all together poetic statement.
The structure is something that "PROFESSIONAL" (notice the quotations which is the only way I can roll my eyes in text) poets would cut you to the bone with this. You are to me the very essence of the poet. You follow your emotions, your pen, and your heart. Nothing is more poetic. Structure is sometimes so systematic that I feel like looking over my shoulder for both big brother and Adolph Hitler. Remember structure is exactly what directly lead to propaganda, and well propaganda almost caused the world to be speaking German. Anyway, away from my rant. You walked outside the elements, as my favorite poets of all time often did. Poe followed a loose structure. Rilke, followed no structure. Even what are in my opinion poets who are not labeled as such due to the fact that they follow no structure such as the late Lenny Bruce and Henry Rollins.
This, if I may speak matter-of-factly is a very ballsy move for someone with your talent. This is the bravest poem (not only because of it's topic) but because of the style, and also because of the self exploration you must have went through to get this piece out.
I am not trying to over express myself. Reading this piece which is so in your face gut wrenchingly expressive that it comes off vague. That takes talent, and to comment on it without expressing oneself to this degree is useless. It would be like reading Shakespeare and simply saying that it was "poetic" and nothing else.
Finally, this scared the hell out of me. Not in the sense of nervousness but in the sense of vulnerability. True fear comes from being vulnerable. You expressed that in topic, story, style, structure, and in a simple open ending.
My hat is off to you, and my quill is extended.
BRAVO!
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Re: A Very Different Year
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by Spike on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 03:54:40 AM AEST
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Snem, nice format-really added to the import and tone of the piece. it must have been a good year. Then again, if your into that Tutonic Zen logic, surely it will come around again, no?
Spikele
ps: we never win the tug-o-war against time... |
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