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God, All I Ever Wanted Was...
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 06:45:12 PM in AEST
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God, all I ever wanted was
Somebody gentle to love
A warm caring person
Sent by you from up above
To have and to hold
Until my last final breath
I promised to love him
Even well after my death
Days came and went
The ice began to melt
His true colours surfaced
Spitefulness became felt
He promised me the world
All I got were mere lies
He betrayed all my trust
And he severed the ties
Now Im left broken
With scars and no dreams
I thought he loved me
But I was wrong it seems
God, all I ever wanted was
Somebody to shelter my fears
All I ended up with was
A sadist who caused me tears...
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Re: God, All I Ever Wanted Was...
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 07:07:14 PM AEST
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Aw Sue, this is so sad. :-(
*huge huge bear hug*
I guess at least your pain inspired a wonderful write though. That's the good.....no the great that came out of this. You write so well and express your feelings so well. I'm sorry you're sad but at least you wrote a wonderful poem from it all. Very well written indeed.
Take care and one more *huge huge bear hug* for ya'. :-)
Love,
Your friend,
Tim
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by Tigger25 on
Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 07:20:57 PM AEST
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I kno the feeling, exactly how you feel.. its not fair... we will find the one.. someday down the road theres one thing to think about,, until then, be free... im sry your sad but very good write....
good job
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 09:26:37 PM AEST
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You know Sue, this is a very emotion felt write, and in all honesty, I think it's impossible for one person not to hurt another. It's complex, but people have the natural instinct to unintentionally screw up - mess up, things, that could have been wonderfully amazing. Sometimes, someone can't see, how great the person infront of them is. A very tender write, and I entirely enjoyed it. Chin up Sue, cause there's lots of people out there, and though everyone, at one point will - more than likely hurt you, you'll find the one that trys his hardest not to, and is worth the hurt he does cause. I hope you find the perfect person, you deserve it. Great write.
-Cassy |
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 09:41:50 PM AEST
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Sue this is so very sad.
Im sorry that this has happened to you.
It seems that the ones with the truest heart
and soul are the ones who get hurt the worst.
Your a true gem and dont let him ruin your heart and make tears fall. He doesnt deserve you your the flower of the world with a heart of gold and I love you sweetheart.
Your a dear friend to me and Ill always treasure you. Im a pm away if you need me .
huge hugs and tissues to dry the tears
your friend in the desert
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by Spazzo on
Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 09:48:31 PM AEST
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I hope things get better for you. This is a great poem.
Take care.
Scott |
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 10:11:00 PM AEST
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Don't ever give up that hope.... You will see better days..
Great emotional write.....
Hugs
Jenni |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 10:56:30 PM AEST
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| Cry no more sweetheart.. God is near you, He is love and will take care of you.. Love Him the most.. and you have everything... you could ever imagine.. I love you so much.. Raquel Leah |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th January 2006 @ 01:56:47 PM AEST
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Sorry 4 your pain sue u r of gentleness in your nature and true artistry in your soul as well as a most skilled poet and of course, a dear friend, in time all things come about. as
always a most magnificent and lovely peice of writting.
((((((((Sue)))))))))
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th January 2006 @ 03:53:47 PM AEST
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There is nothing worse than that feeling of betrayal, I've gone through periods of my life when its made me hard hearted.
Took me a long time to realise it wasn't doing me any good.
Good thought provoking poetry.
J |
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 13th January 2006 @ 01:38:53 AM AEST
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Well written poem Sue I like how you
mentioned in the liner that you still hang on to
hope which is something we must always
hold on to. I think most people can relate to
the subject you wrote about, but just realize
that you deserve someone better and that
your heart will heal. A wonderful poem my
dear and I will pray for happier days ahead.
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by bernard2 on
Friday, 13th January 2006 @ 04:00:09 AM AEST
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| Many a dream is shattered by the ugliness of physical violence. Poem strong very good write from bernard 2 |
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 15th January 2006 @ 03:21:13 AM AEST
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Dear Sue,
Be at peace... there is One whos love is greater than your sorrow. Dont forget this, that He is the Comforter, because He cannot hurt us. He is always faithful, and never leaves you nor forsakes you, if you ask and allow for His protection... of course, we ourselves all make mistakes. Our love is far from perfect, and so we must be gracious to ourselves and to each other, willing to let Him change us a little more every day to His perfect image. Thats why Jesus died, to forgive your sins, and to take them away. Whats done is done, set your mind apon the the future hopes, of meeting Him in His glory, of a world remade with pure love. Forgive others as Hes forgiven you, and be open to His leading. That will lead to a life abundant in love, joy, and peace. We cant change what others do, God has given us each the precious gift of free will. However, we are each responsible for ourselves, and how we respond to difficulties and others hurtfulness. But do not be afraid! Father God is always willing to help you in your weakness, and He will never leave you nor forsake you. He is a freind by your side, if you want Him. He has and is all you ever shall need. Get close to the True Lord of All Creation and you wont be dissapointed! He made you and He loves you. May peace be with you...
Joshua
ps. also, I wrote a poem about something like what you seem to have gone through during a similar experiance in my life... its called 'candlelit'. you might find it encouraging! |
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by In_a_while on
Monday, 16th January 2006 @ 02:07:10 PM AEST
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Very sad piece....and i'm taken by its brutal
honesty. If ever there was a way to soothe
the burn, it's writing fine poetry like this....
"God, all I ever wanted was
Somebody to shelter my fears"
You'll find that special someone i'm sure of it :)
Take care, you have my best wishes
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 17th January 2006 @ 12:06:31 AM AEST
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I know these feelings all too well. Sad but beautifully written.
huggs, luv,
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 21st January 2006 @ 12:44:20 AM AEST
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This might sound sort of odd, Sue - but when I read something like this... I see hope there on the page. That is not to say that I have overlooked the pain expressed or don't empathize... not at all. Rather, it just a silver-lining sort of view... I suppose I just see it as a conclusion, an opportunity to move beyond the hurt and toward something that lifts you up instead of bringing you down. Many (myself among them once) linger a long while in that painful place before moving on... the hope I see here comes of realizing you're no longer there.
*hugs*
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st January 2006 @ 04:50:04 AM AEST
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| hey you come talk to me,,or i'll kick yer butt,,we need to write a happy poem together to get us both out of the doldrums,,so come on I'm waitind Roo for you waht yer gonnd do don't make me boo hoo,,,,,,good write by the way ,,love the poem and you my friend,,,, |
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 28th January 2006 @ 10:25:30 PM AEST
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Oh my.. Sue-
..such pain..
I pray that you are sent the love
and shelter you so rightly deserve-
All My Love Thoughts and prayers to You Darlin'
Always-
B |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd February 2006 @ 01:07:11 AM AEST
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| I know this...I've felt this time and time again. You expressed the pain and anguish exquisitely. It's unbearable right now, I know, but you're truly a strong person and I know you'll get through it. Hugs |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd February 2006 @ 06:21:09 PM AEST
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aw Susie Q! Dear sweetest of hearts, do not be troubled. I can not
imagine anyone not being drawn to your kind and gentle soul. You
exude so much warmth, dear girl and I know someone out there
is going to be OH so lucky to be the recipient of your loving heart.
This write evokes much sadness in me and how well you know,
I do relate. Lovely write sweetie.
Love and hugs
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 3rd February 2006 @ 10:05:37 AM AEST
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| Another masterpiece. I am sorry you had to go through that, but keep reaching for the stars and you will find one...Mike |
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by moses on
Saturday, 4th February 2006 @ 04:56:15 PM AEST
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A lot of ppl are inspired by your work, i also am one of them. keep it up and i also am sorry you had to go thru that.
love reading your work,
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by Sinned on
Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 09:36:38 AM AEST
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Eternal_Dreamer
Heartfelt !
A true poet writes from the heart.
Sinned |
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by Lilly-Quill on
Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 12:18:13 PM AEST
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God this sounds like me; and yet, I scared Mr. Perfect away. So fear comes in many packages, despite anyone that we love. Sometimes it's not the object of our love that's the problem but fear itself. Just living well is acknowledging but, also, letting go.
Bravo! This is a brilliantly ascribed, so packed with meaningful rich emotion.
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by wizard on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 01:13:10 PM AEST
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very nicley done...quite sad, though.
wiz |
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by myheartsvoice on
Friday, 9th February 2007 @ 10:24:46 PM AEST
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So sad to read this, love based on deception is never real love. A truly beautiful out pour of your emotions. Wish you well, may you find what your looking for in time.
myheartsvoice
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by Dom on
Friday, 27th July 2007 @ 04:53:26 PM AEST
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Such a sad outpouring of emotion onto the page. Each word could be a tear, they are that powerful.
I'm sorry you had to go through this, but I do agree with Snemmy that there is some hope in this, even if its just in the knowledge that you were hurt and can now move on, or if its because you can use this to grow yourself.
Life can be cruel, especially when we try so hard to do the right thing.
Powerful, emotional write,
Dom |
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