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Your Bags
Contributed by
weepingprophet
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Monday, 23rd January 2006 @ 03:59:09 PM in AEST
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i'm done
count me lost
i'm a memory
the fatal cost
of a good life
say good-bye
so long
i'm so gone
pack up your bags for leaving
promise is disbelieving
that you'll be retreating
for me
i've never been enough
never will turn out to be
i'm done believing
that life is something more
than what i've been percieving
pack your bags
you're leaving
i'm done
i'm a memory
say good-bye
i'm so gone
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2006-01-23 15:59:09]
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Re: Your Bags
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by outlaw_mutiny on
Monday, 23rd January 2006 @ 08:33:49 PM AEST
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| nice write dude, but dont go stand tall you dont need anyone to catch you if you fall, so stand tall thats right refuse to go quietly into the night stand tall stand up and fight |
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Re: Your Bags
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by shelby on
Monday, 23rd January 2006 @ 08:34:13 PM AEST
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Strong write, loved the style. The words fell upon the page in a beat almost like someone stomping off and away, I loved that.
I did just what you are speaking of here, I said you will never see me again and walked away that was several years ago. You know what?? Life is 100 percent better. Change is good for your soul and when people are hurting you its a good place to start.
A new year a new adventure!
Peace to you
Michelle |
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Re: Your Bags
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 03:04:20 AM AEST
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| -breathtaking- |
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Re: Your Bags
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by enigma on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 10:57:39 AM AEST
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...they're right about the technique/style...it definitely works here...nothing contrived...no frills...every word punches home...
...it has to hurt, though...but, when enough is enough, you gotta walk...you have to find your "Self"...when you do, you're really gonna like what you find...
...thanks for sharing,
ron...enigma |
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Re: Your Bags
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 07:25:49 PM AEST
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i'm done believing
that life is something more
than what i've been percieving
pack your bags
you're leaving
Straightforward, no bs, it's great! I only wish i had the
gusto to make this demand upon my "other."
Keep up the excellent writing
I'm a big fan of your work
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Re: Your Bags
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by chulysnacky on
Thursday, 26th January 2006 @ 05:04:24 PM AEST
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| that was really good, but i think you could've added more to it.. good write keep it up |
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