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Goodbyes
Contributed by
Kunoichi
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Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 09:41:29 PM in AEST
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Uttering goodbyes,
Thinking of your last days.
Looking in dead eyes,
Why are you so crazed?!
You've stolen my essence,
You've scarred my soul.
Gone is my innocence,
My heart's a big hole.
I needed family,
I needed love.
But you've given me
No one to trust.
Uttering goodbyes,
Thinking of your wrongs.
Looking in my eyes,
My life is gone.
Copyright ©
Kunoichi
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2006-01-24 21:41:29]
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Re: Goodbyes
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by the_pied_piper on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 09:54:44 PM AEST
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| wow that was good, i liked how you kept the words , or lines i should say, short and concice, it made it really good well written |
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Re: Goodbyes
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 10:00:00 PM AEST
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| A good poem. |
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Re: Goodbyes
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by dance_dance on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 10:15:42 PM AEST
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| I really liked your poem...epsecially the second stanza, great word chioce with essence. good job :) |
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Re: Goodbyes
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by xxbreathlessx on
Tuesday, 24th January 2006 @ 10:20:00 PM AEST
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| a very powerful poem, it shows the pain and anger you feel and so simply too. good job |
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Re: Goodbyes
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by enigma on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 11:29:18 AM AEST
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...no matter how complete and whole we manage to become, good-byes always take away a part of us...then again, something is forever left with us, too...I, too, liked the second stanza...what it said and how you said it made it easily soak into my spirit...
...so sad, though...
...thanks,
ron...enigma |
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Re: Goodbyes
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 12:19:13 PM AEST
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| Nicely written. |
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Re: Goodbyes
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by Poetic_Influence on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 02:01:32 PM AEST
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| confusing int he begining,but nice write |
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