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Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
Contributed by
spike
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Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 10:25:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Lighter than air she brushes me,
A feathery stroke along my cheek
And as I draw that inward, shuddering breath
And reflexively reach a hand to my face,
I sense she has returned to this place.
But was she ever gone?
Sometimes the sun feels warmer to me
And I am sure, so sure,
That her light, a quanta or a beam
Has joined that solar stream.
And in the cacophony of the world,
Sometimes Im certain I hear her voice
A familiar whisper, so delicate and fine,
That, as I tilt my head for the source
Disappears, as if its run its course.
I could think myself alone,
That souls fly back to their perch
Or dont exist at all
That beauty fades into nothing,
And life is meaningless and small.
Yet in those lonely moments,
Unforgiving in their pain
When I ache to feel her warmth
Or run my fingers through her hair,
I am consoled to sense her near.
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 11:00:29 PM AEST
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| This one moved me to tears, what a write. Haunting. Thanks for sharing, Peace to you, Laura |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by NoSaint on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 11:31:36 PM AEST
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Exquisite
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 11:52:40 PM AEST
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This.... this struck a chord so deeply within me that I haven't words enough to comment in any kind of proper way. Soul speak, this is... tender, moving, and so eloquently real.
Beautiful... just beautiful.
~Snemmy
(who will try to compose herself... eventually)
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 12:39:23 AM AEST
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WoW Spike you always captivate ur reader and leave them in awe. This perfect, flawless penned piece of poetry struck me deep inside my heart. May ur pen always flow so eloquently with such beautiful masterpieces. Always a pleasure to visit ur pages again for one is never disappoint when they read ur remarkable work.
*warm hugs*
~sue~ |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by emystar on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 02:42:37 AM AEST
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Totally awesome.
Remarkably written.
huggs,
emy
It soothes like a breate of fresh air on a hot Summer day on the beach. |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 03:06:36 AM AEST
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This is work in searing with emotional brilliance. I had a very comfortable visit in these words, and revisited them three times before I posted. I will definitely be looking for more of your work. Completely Impressive.
I am not a big fan of letting poems "marinate", especially for a period of time longer than a day or two. When poems marinate they take on a whole different flavor than the had initially. Just as when food marinates. The marinate may make it juicier, and a lot more tender.
But the verse is to me, supposed to be served as a raw cutlet straight from the skeleton of the soul. This is why this poem is so powerful. It's fresh not stale and marinated.
- SCM |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 04:01:19 AM AEST
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| I am speechless. |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by bird_nest_hair on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 10:55:58 AM AEST
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| so beautiful. |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by WordsOfTheHeart on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 11:57:19 AM AEST
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Amazing write. I absolutely loved it. Your style, choice of words, it all just fit so well together. Great job.
~Alucia~ |
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by shelby on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 02:01:41 PM AEST
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brilliant
Michelle |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by crazy on
Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 08:44:47 AM AEST
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| it was really pretty g j |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 06:56:43 PM AEST
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S~
Deep down, arresting and tender write. Wonderfully touching . . .
so much so that my own heart is stilled to hear her as well.
The last stanza is so truely beautiful, spike, I hardly have words
enough to convey how this moved me. I have felt this way.
You captured the moment flawlessly.
~B |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th March 2006 @ 03:50:19 PM AEST
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Excellent.A poem that in the coming months,I'm sure,will touch me more deeply than it already has,
Den |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 21st March 2006 @ 08:59:42 AM AEST
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It's your favourite stalker!
your poetry doesn't get any worse does it?
Bloody good write old chap.
J. |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 4th April 2006 @ 02:19:22 PM AEST
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| Before I make a comment I read the previous ones on your poems to avoid redundancy and hear common comments: awe, perfection, brilliant. All accolades to a master. You gift us. Keep it up. Oh. This poem is SUPERB. |
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Re: Ripples in the Still Waters of the Heart
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by MystycLore on
Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 09:06:13 PM AEST
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an eloquent remberance to the moments that sear the soul...
the smallest things make the largest ripples |
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