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Long Procession of Black Limousines
Contributed by
Jyssvw22
on
Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 09:53:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Nothing can replace experience
Misfortune, brings a man back from bliss
From ignorance
If the description portrays calmness
Passive aggressive, eager to get
From one place to the next
Brought forth from dusty hills
Most familiar is the distance
Something similar
In complex social selves
Implicit progress
Gives impetus to rise above the blind spot
First impressions have lasting effects
Primary zombies
A lucrative linear analogy
Promote from within
Who operates independent from
The question of the self
Timing is everything sweet
A blister of a second off
Leaves the sugar obsolete
An alter
Join two hands colliding off beat
Golden bands
Significance of love at the suggestion of a hell
Cerebral specialization
Platitudes hemispheres
Split conscious into determined materialism
Hypnosis to relax
Cells leaking
Platelets of milk and red health
Quality of goods
Possessions of lascivious
Pornographic plastic
Containers of ineffable appraisers
Property jugged below the poverty line
Mystics and whiskey begin to alter the mind
Meditation to keep the orchids flowering
A trance to save the eye from going blind
Spontaneous recovery of a lost hope
Restored energy
Sleep apnea hits the sack
Insomnia
Forced awakenings with awkward anxiety
Preparedness, clock faces the perfect direction
Hypertension
Blood salt content under constant observation
Wind-pipes constrict to polarization
The story
Is a narcoleptics version
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Re: Long Procession of Black Limousines
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 01:38:14 AM AEST
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whirlpool of energies, emotive suggestions, quick themes and cut-up pace.
i really enjoyed this. your pieces always ring an ancient toll inside my psyche.
"rise above the blind spot" --an interesting metaphor.
"Timing is everything sweet
A blister of a second off
Leaves the sugar obsolete" --this is all so true. I have come to realise myself, in 'adult life'.
This piece is so thought provoking, challenging, and some how silently rhetoric.
"Significance of love at the suggestion of a hell" --such interesting perspectives. i would have never detected, such intricate angles and views of these generalised themes.
The second last stanza appealing me to the most. The physiological, tangible structure of the intangible mind.
Stunning. Simply stunning this work of yours.
A gifted hand you have. |
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