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Blood Stained Water
Contributed by
detourchick
on
Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 06:55:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Blood Stained Water
Innocent play, time of dusk
Splash, splash as the children play, unaware of surroundings
Screams and yelps of joy fill the air
A shadow glides toward
An accelerating heart beat
Alerts your senses
Fear is felt
Then a sensation absorbs your body,
A drive for the shore
Muscles go numb
Helplessness traps you
Deafening silence is all that you hear
Lifeless eyes look at you with no sympathy
The water becomes deathly crimson
No more heartbeat is heard as
Evolutions greatest creation swims away unscathed
Only with its fin protruding from the blood stained water
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Re: Blood Stained Water
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by SmileSkinDeep on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 12:23:50 AM AEST
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| Interesting, I take it you live by the ocean... |
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Re: Blood Stained Water
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by drtylilsecret on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 12:44:29 AM AEST
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ok the end sent shivers down my spine. freaky. great poem though, and i'm assuming you're talking about a shark here? very "Jaws". love it, but still freaky.
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Re: Blood Stained Water
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by detourchick on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 05:51:05 PM AEST
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ok hehe hi im the writer of this poem obvi but i just have to clear up uh i do have a house near the ocean but i got this feeling once from watching jaws just made me feel so amazing and apprehensive im actauly inlove with the great white so i thought a poem was a great wya to express my feelings
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