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In The Moment Of Silence...
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 07:09:02 PM in AEST
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In The Moment Of Silence
Im a shattered little piece
A fragment of your past
I lay in emotional turmoil
After been broken at last
You used and abused me
I lived with your lies
Eyes dispense hot tears
I wished theyd subside
Im ceasing to exist
For reality now hits
Falling to the floor
I shatter into bits
Strewn all over the ground
Sharded and beyond repair
Happy memories of long ago
Only adding to the despair
In the moment of silence
Time shall suddenly stand still
For my battered torn heart
To piece together its will
Copyright ©
eternal_dreamer
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by emystar on
Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 10:59:59 PM AEST
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An incredible write.
A bit sad but oh so true.
Huggs,
emy |
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 12:25:16 AM AEST
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Dearest Sue..
TO HELL with who ever found it necessary,
by avoiding truth and or guilt, to hurt you in this way!!
Don't make me come down there!.. lol
...I'm here for you, anytime you wanna chat-
As Always - All Mine to You..
Billy
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 03:47:11 AM AEST
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very sad and deep write.
you did well
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 07:21:04 AM AEST
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Very tragic. It is inevitable that the truest hearts shall be broken, I fear. I feel so deeply sorrowful and sympathetic to your dilemma. I too have had my heart neglected and stomped on many times over. Sometimes it makes me a cold bitter person. I hope in your case that does not last, as it rarely does for me.
The heart of the romantic is bound to find another. Sometimes the road seems longer than it actually is. I know you will find he who will become your lover peace. Until then, the hell with this jerk ( I hate to use Man on High's) comments but I completely agree. Games are played usually by those who do not know how to play them. You see a true romantic sees romance as a battle or a war, but does not pit the person he or she is romancing as the foe. They pit themselves, the things that they do not like within themselves. Love is a battle within extended to another without. This person was simply playing a game they do not know how to play. Hearts are not broken in battle. Battle is graceful and delicate. It is a game that hearts are broken in. Games tease, neglect, and when you win the game the spoils are rarely as rewarding as we fantasize them to be.
Move on dear lady, you will find your warrior. Leave the games with those who do not know how to play.
Your work here is captivating, so delicately heart breaking and tragic. You use a great rhythm, and style, complimenting that with well woven words. An astounding, yet heart breaking write!
Take care.
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 08:53:45 AM AEST
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| Sue, there is no pain greater than that of a broken heart. Such a sad write but you will find that special someone to hold your heart with tender hands and mend it. you are right "to piece together it will".............Mike |
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by detourchick on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 05:46:49 PM AEST
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| so good totally made me just feel. feel angry sad and just o man that just good : ) |
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 09:24:49 PM AEST
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| There are a lot of broken couples for many reasons.. the best thing you can do is to find a wonderful counselor.. one who knows how to give sound advice in the area you need to be taken care of.. and who can help you through in order to help yourself get stronger..choose one of your own faith, beliefs..you are a very beautiful person, you can offer so much more elsewhere.. we cannot make anyone do anything, it is their choice.. so also it is our choice.. list your priorities.. what do you want to happen, then go after it.. I pray you well my dear sweet friend.. hugs.. raquelLeah |
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 10:05:55 AM AEST
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Dearest, sweet Susie Q!!
How desperately tragic for you to find your heart the victim
of someone's cruel amusement. Obviously, he did not
deserve you, (although, I know, I KNOW) that brings a trite
relief. I am sorry this happened to you, dear girl, but you
know, (more than most) how I positively relate to this.
Always here for you sweetie.
Wonderfully written and with amazing emotion!
*love and hugs to you*
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by moses on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 04:19:30 PM AEST
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Hey sue! Again amazing....I can deffinitly relate to this one. I write about my heart being cold too, I feel the same way here as you.
Well done and as always keep it up,
-moses |
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by Spazzo on
Monday, 6th March 2006 @ 09:23:53 PM AEST
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This is deep, I hope things get better for you.
Take care.
Scott |
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 10:45:19 PM AEST
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"The heart is a fragile thing. Once broken it's
hard for it to mend."
Oh that is true and I must say its good to be
back and be enlightened by brilliant poets
such as yourself. I thought this poem was
great and of course I can relate to it. I thought
the ending of the poem was really powerful
and added to the overall effect of the poem.
Personally, the last 6 lines of this write were
my favourite. Great job!
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 06:58:38 PM AEST
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Sue, this is a terribly sad read, and I do hope things have improved for you since, as you deserve so much more. I see I have plenty more to read from you (!) Good for you, writing up a storm! Can't wait to catch up, my friend : )
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Re: In The Moment Of Silence...
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 13th December 2006 @ 05:31:48 PM AEST
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Sue, I hope this is a crafted piece from the imagination of a fantastic writer and not from your reality. If it's from reality, I wanna do somethin' like break the guy's neck! Wonderful write.
wabl
KenMoore
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