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M&M's Scattered On the Floor
Contributed by
justme03
on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 10:22:31 AM in AEST
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Sweet & Colorful
My first real love
Unforgettable
Holding hands
Soaring to the sky
on a playground swing
Rain clouds come to play
Ghosts of our past
rain upon us
We run
laughing, but tears
mix with rain
and we take shelter
M&Ms
Hard candy on the outside
like the shell each of us
is trying to melt through
to get to
each other
We want chocolate
but, are we moving
too fast?
Sweet & Colorful
My first real love
Unforgettable
kind of like the
M&Ms we
scattered on the
bedroom floor
the room we
dont play in
anymore. . .
~Kortnie~
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Re: M&M's Scattered On the Floor
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 10:30:52 AM AEST
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Ohhhhh the love of m@ms. This is a delightful read. Detailed and flowing. Loved how you compared mms to life and living.
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Re: M&M's Scattered On the Floor
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by flamingblade on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 12:28:00 PM AEST
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very good poem
good metaphors loved it
keep it up
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Re: M&M's Scattered On the Floor
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by Jackee_line on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 04:12:57 PM AEST
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| well done |
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Re: M&M's Scattered On the Floor
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by Somnium on
Saturday, 1st April 2006 @ 06:29:45 AM AEST
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Sweet poem, love the similes.
Very sentimental
top job! |
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Re: M&M's Scattered On the Floor
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by jsringo on
Sunday, 25th May 2008 @ 12:00:04 PM AEST
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I am wondering if you left the end vague to let the reader imagine about the bedroom whether she is
gone and the writer is alone in the bedroom or that
you both worked your way through the hard shell and making whoopee is now what is taking place in the Bedroom. |
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Re: M&M's Scattered On the Floor
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by Sheveg on
Monday, 28th June 2010 @ 01:35:30 PM AEST
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Interesting. A person could definitely get different ideas about what it means.
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Re: M&M's Scattered On the Floor
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by allie_07 on
Tuesday, 25th January 2011 @ 07:14:00 PM AEST
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| very well done. |
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