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Janie's Funeral
Contributed by
flamingblade
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Thursday, 2nd March 2006 @ 03:39:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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In the black cloth
Janie was dressed
But it was messy
Never even pressed
The coffin lid was open
But no one went up
Because the blue ring
around her neck was no joke
She meant it
When she made herself choke.
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2006-03-02 15:39:28]
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Re: Janie's Funeral
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by twick on
Thursday, 2nd March 2006 @ 11:16:12 PM AEST
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| hmm, I think the fourth in the series is the best so far. This one seems to lack that one definable thing that's in the others. I think the only thing that is worth interest is that she was dressed messy. I do think though that this series is good and worth the writing but this one didn't do it for me. |
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Re: Janie's Funeral
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by boobiepeach on
Friday, 3rd March 2006 @ 12:08:00 PM AEST
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all of your series are powerful and expressive
i do like them indeed
please keep them comming
great writes truly
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