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u took her to the basement
Contributed by
angeleyez
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Monday, 6th March 2006 @ 04:07:12 PM in AEST
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take a seat u murderer
take a seat and dont denie
that u killed poor Laura foster
and u deserve to die
u took to the basement
as she pleeded for her life
you took her to the basement
as u sharpened your dull knife
she screamed and cried for mercy
and begged to be excused
one tear drop fell so shamefully
as u removed her clothes and shoes
u took her to the basement
of you old victorian home
u took her to the basement
and you waited till u were alone
you dug her grave four feet wide
dug it three feet deep
rolled the damp cold clay over her
u stomped it with your feet
took her to the basement
stabbed her with a knife
took her to the basement
right there you took her life
as you wait so tolerant
for the chair to start
you think the zaps have started
tis none other than ur heart
when you took her to the basement
that was a big mistake
when you took her to the basement
you determined you own fate
as your thinking your last thought
your hands are sweating rain
its only justice cuz u got caught
i hope you undergo her same pain
Copyright ©
angeleyez
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2006-03-06 16:07:12]
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Re: u took her to the basement
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by OzChick on
Monday, 6th March 2006 @ 09:35:26 PM AEST
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WOW. Is this based on a true story? This is a well structured poem with a powerful story. Rhythm and rhyme were pretty tight but I noticed a few spelling errors. If you cleaned those up this would be a brilliant poem that packs a punch. Not that it doesn't now, I felt many things while reading it. Well expressed.
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Re: u took her to the basement
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by Drapes on
Thursday, 4th May 2006 @ 07:02:44 PM AEST
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Oh, wow. This is so sad. I hope it's not ture although I have a feeling it is. I'm so sorry for this. It made me want to cry =( Best wishes.
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