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If You See Me In The Dark...
Contributed by
White_Raven
on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 07:59:50 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I live among the shadows.
I see in the dark.
But do not fear if you hear my bark. Black as the night,
or bright as the dawn. Silver as the moon, or gold
as the sun.
Do not cringe at my cry, do not fright at
sight of my eyes. Dont crawl or back away. I am
not hear to cause you pain. My claws are long, my fangs are sharp.
Do not fear if you hear my bark. Eyes of gold or blue or red. But I
you shall not dread. I may look mean, I may seem fake.
But I am true in my actions of fate. I dare to dream.
I dare to believe. Is that why you are so afraid of me?
I dare to be honest, I dare to be true. I dared to be loyal
to all I knew. Even in the pain that you have caused, I
will not harm you, not at all. So if you see me in the dark,
don not fear me or my bark.
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Re: If You See Me In The Dark...
(User Rating: 1 )
by chaos78 on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 10:30:11 AM AEST
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| I like it not that bad |
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Re: If You See Me In The Dark...
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by Naughtygurl on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 12:28:02 PM AEST
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Hey your poem was kool, i actually liked it.. and i dont think its stupid
♥ britt |
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Re: If You See Me In The Dark...
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by thexshattered on
Friday, 23rd February 2007 @ 10:48:04 PM AEST
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This has a catchy rhythm, though I think your spacing should be smoother. Like instead of...
"Do not cringe at my cry, do not fright at
sight of my eyes. Dont crawl or back away. I am
not hear to cause you pain. My claws are long, my fangs are sharp.
Do not fear if you hear my bark."
try...
"Do not cringe at my cry,
do not fright at sight of my eyes.
Dont crawl or back away.
I am not hear to cause you pain.
My claws are long, my fangs are sharp.
Do not fear if you hear my bark."
Your rhyming skills are extraordinary, by the way. |
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