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why?
Contributed by
jackster2010
on
Sunday, 19th March 2006 @ 12:53:33 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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for you my love
i can not see
but i no for sure
we are not meant to be
i love to see u
i love it when u laugh
but when you're not
it cuts my life in half
theres no point of this
i need to cry
i look at her
and i wonder why
you love her so
but i love you
i try to tell you
but it wont do
i need to show it
you need to see
i wish you knew
what we could be
i cant believe it
i wish it wasnt true
i wish i was her
but there's nothing i can do
you know i love you
but you dont care
when i think about it
it makes my heart tare
i love this guy
i wish you knew
but you dont even see it
do you
i wish you were here
i wish i could see you
but when you're with her
you dont even care...do you?
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Re: why?
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th March 2006 @ 04:28:40 AM AEST
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| I know EXACTLY where you are coming from. I'm in a similar position. Wish i could tell you that it gets easier but it doesn't. Good luck |
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Re: why?
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by OzChick on
Sunday, 19th March 2006 @ 04:37:25 AM AEST
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Oh honey, lose him. You know this isn't a healthy situation for you. I may not know you but I'm sure you deserve better than that.
As for the poem it is pretty good, a few spelling errors let the presentation down only slightly. Your use of a lower case 'i' when refering to yourself adds to the feeling of insignificance in this boys life and I don't think you should change it. Well done and I hope things work out for you.
~Jenny~ |
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