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Memory's Scar
Contributed by
kidnic
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Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 10:46:55 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Left with alibis and broken lies,
I shuffle dejectedly back to home.
A trail of a thousand broken lines;
A chattering mouth, left to roam.
Leaving sunny times and high-fives,
And smiles from a lyricist's line,
I say forgetting the past isn't better,
And taking the future, I make it mine.
Clouds of red, orange, and purple,
On that fine summer day,
Will never be seen that magnificent,
Or never again, such a display.
And in the ride home with memories left,
The smell of the beach still fills the car.
I now look back on these things and smile,
And marvel forever at memory's scar.
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kidnic
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2006-03-23 10:46:55]
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Re: Memory's Scar
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by shelby on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 11:15:58 AM AEST
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perfectly flowing and delightful. Yes memories can scar but the ones that are the happy scars are the ones to hold onto and cherish.
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Re: Memory's Scar
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by ButchHoward on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 01:04:13 PM AEST
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This is very well written with good rythm and meter. It reminds me how powerful our memories are. I like the line about the "smell of the beach" in the car. The good thing about having scars is, if we have them, the wound is healed. Great job!
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Re: Memory's Scar
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by crazy on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 01:27:36 PM AEST
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| kool! i loike how you say your memories have scars.yep they do.i love he structure of this piece.well done |
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