|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Love Rhymes
Contributed by
Mangs
on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 04:57:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
|
In a world so wistfully woven
A fluttering heart, a magical moment.
Chances taken, wounded fell,
Love finally cast its mystical spell.
Guards let down, arms held open
Fears aside, lovers wish is spoken.
With tender kiss, this fate is sealed,
An enchanting world is suddenly revealed.
A deft whisper, gravity defied
With the softest of touch, the heart just flied.
Like a dream born of a virgin mind,
A fire felt, returned in kind.
Face to face, eye to eye
Words not spoken, bodies entwine.
Witness a moment, other n'er see,
Ignites a beginning, that was meant to be.
Tender and precious, a sacred event
Sensuous souls join, for a gift heavensent.
A bond that is blissful, a promise is kept,
Now with a kiss, sweet lips can be met.
Heaving sighs, life is spent
Held in a union, sacrosanct.
Ending in heaven, rhythm divine,
Left with love, that could only be mine
Copyright ©
Mangs
... [
2006-03-23 16:57:47]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Love Rhymes
(User Rating: 1 )
by jonquilcottage on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 05:41:10 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| this is definitely a love poem and very beautifully put |
|
|
Re: Love Rhymes
(User Rating: 1 )
by Archie on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 08:26:25 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I think the two of you did a great job writing this. The exotic and passionate side of love fill many hearts with fond memories and longings. 5 stars |
|
|
Re: Love Rhymes
(User Rating: 1 )
by ilovelillbj on
Tuesday, 4th April 2006 @ 11:53:48 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
great poem, surprisingly so considering there are 2 poets. well co-ordinated and full of feelings i'm flying high on right now :)
x sarah x |
|
|
Re: Love Rhymes
(User Rating: 1 )
by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 26th April 2006 @ 10:09:02 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I'm having a bit of trouble embracing "flied" in the second line of the third stanza. Not wanting to be off base here, I did check an online dictionary and found that it was willing enough to accept flied as spelled and used correctly here - but, my mind keeps insisting that "flew" is the past tense of fly and that the rhyme here, therefore, seems a bit forced.
Beyond that, I thought this was well executed. Without the bolding, it would be difficult to guess what lines were written by each of you. It 'fits' together quite nicely and paints a rather lovely picture. Nicely done!
Hoping you don't mind the feedback provided in the first paragraph above,
~Snemmy
|
|
|
Re: Love Rhymes
(User Rating: 1 )
by little_genna on
Thursday, 27th April 2006 @ 10:40:14 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| This is amazing, I felt like i was dancing with the words! it left me feeling so amazing... even with my current situation....wow |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Site Help
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
