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Darkness
Contributed by
Pyrofungus
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Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 03:24:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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A day in which there wasn't a patch of blue in the sky,
And the clouds were so thick, and so dark
Not even any light, would shine through those clouds.
It was night, night without the moon and the stars to share just
a little light with us.
Yet it was still the wee hours of the morning
There were cries that morning,
That went on through the evening
There was loss,
There was emptiness,
There were crumbled up butterflies
And shattered smiles between the two!
But not a single word had been let out to one another
There was silence
There was a fogged up window
With tears running down it's face
Yet not a single word was shed!
Copyright ©
Pyrofungus
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2006-03-25 15:24:36]
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Re: Darkness
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by drtylilsecret on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 03:38:17 PM AEST
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it seemed as though the last few lines were rather weak, and the title unoriginal, but other than that really great write, i loved the imagery u created.
~natalya
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Re: Darkness
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by hardcoreputa on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 03:53:24 PM AEST
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| i really like the imagry in this poem. i think you should add more to the end because it seems a little vague. |
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Re: Darkness
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by WhyAmIHere on
Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 04:16:38 AM AEST
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Verry nice, I don't know how to do allignment either
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