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Panicked
Contributed by
felicitous
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Tuesday, 28th March 2006 @ 07:39:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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Slow breathing,
Methodical pacing,
In your mind.
You've walked these steps before,
Or danced...
*scream*
Panic, an afterthought.
Embers of a fire;
Left behind,
Only remnants.
A relic.
But you'll exist,
In your memories.
The only place still true.
_____________________
_________________________
panic in my soul
as i sense you withdraw
from yourself
you expected greatness
i expected
honesty
disappointed and broken
without direction or desire
recede into yourself
find that comforting apathy
while i lie awake at night
wondering
why...
_________________
______________________
smiling
solid
sanctity
soiled
slipping
suffer
surface
shoot...
Copyright ©
felicitous
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2006-03-28 07:39:25]
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Re: Panicked
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by Hautebush on
Tuesday, 28th March 2006 @ 12:44:15 PM AEST
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| Felicitous, you did a good job of showing your agony over a painful situation. The alliteration of the s'es at the ending are especially grand. Poems are for reading aloud and the repitition of sounds ends this poem very well. Keep writing! |
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