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The Notably Forgotten
Contributed by
twick
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Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 08:00:35 PM in AEST
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oops
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Standing under the fluorescent lights
been waiting for an hour or two
wondering how long it will be
till you come get me
I hate the color of my skin under the lights
almost transparent so you can see the veins
I stare at them while I wait.
Follow the patterns with my eyes
and trace them with my fingers.
Wondering...
How long will you be
I'm tired of waiting
too late.
Copyright ©
twick
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2006-03-29 20:00:35]
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Re: The Notably Forgotten
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 10:17:30 PM AEST
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Nice images here.
Andrew |
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Re: The Notably Forgotten
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by purplestary on
Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 10:23:28 PM AEST
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| i really like this. you have done something noone does anymore....you took a moment in time and described it...and you described it well...you brought it to life....you made us see it...and feel it. nicely done. |
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Re: The Notably Forgotten
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by summer on
Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 10:57:54 PM AEST
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Loved this line
" hate the color of my skin under the lights
almost transparent so you can see the veins
I stare at them while I wait.
Follow the patterns with my eyes
and trace them with my fingers."
Great description and imagery
Well done X
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