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You're Telling Me
Contributed by
Mild_Tempest
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Sunday, 2nd April 2006 @ 06:46:15 PM in AEST
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Youre telling me,
Dreams cant come true,
The skys unreachable,
The ocean isnt blue.
Youre telling me,
I can never go anywhere,
Youll always control me,
Youll be here and Ill be there.
Youre telling me,
I can be replaced,
I cant amount to anything,
My life is misplaced.
Youre telling me,
Im nobody, no one,
That I cant shout back,
That I have to be beaten.
Im telling you,
That youre wrong,
That I can change the world,
That I do belong.
Im telling you,
Im not worthless,
That I can protect myself,
Cause lifes a fortress.
So believe me when I say,
That youre wrong to put me down,
And when Im swimming in sorrow,
Ill be alive at the end, that I wont drown.
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Mild_Tempest
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2006-04-02 18:46:15]
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Re: You're Telling Me
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by drtylilsecret on
Sunday, 2nd April 2006 @ 07:02:35 PM AEST
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totally see where you're coming from, great write, and good luck with not drowning =P.
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Re: You're Telling Me
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd April 2006 @ 01:38:27 AM AEST
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| I know how you feel having people telling you that you can't do it. Makes me want to do it more just to prove them wrong. Good write. |
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Re: You're Telling Me
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by twick on
Monday, 3rd April 2006 @ 01:57:54 AM AEST
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| I liked this poem but I will say is was kind of predictable. After reading the first stanza I was pretty sure how it would end. Not that the message isn't great, I think it's awesome. It's just I almost didn't read the whole thing because I knew how it would end. In fact what kept me from stopping was your asking for comments. Keep writing! |
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Re: You're Telling Me
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by bigduck6769 on
Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 11:57:20 PM AEST
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i have done and seen things already in my life that very few have had to do or see..
overcoming and proving people wrong is my reason for going.
amazing poem.. |
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Re: You're Telling Me
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by Lo2681 on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 12:41:13 AM AEST
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Wow nice way to say...F you all I can do it on my own. Good way to stand on your own 2 feet. I like it a lot. It's good to have a strong attitude...it's what makes you someone amongst all the other people. Beautifully put into words!
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