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Diamonds
Contributed by
Kimberlynn
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Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 09:11:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Have you ever seen wet diamonds? Those cold, liquid, stones That shine and gleam as they trickle down Until their gone They pour out of pools of color And the stream flows Down porclein peach
Tear droplets falling Rocks yet un-cut Down a wet face Have you ever seen these diamond tears Flying down a child's cheeks These are sacred, if you a called To take the time Build a dam So the tears can stop
Copyright ©
Kimberlynn
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2006-04-05 21:11:54] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Diamonds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 09:24:06 PM AEST (User
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This was very impressive and completely beyond what I expected from the title. I love the way you used diamonds to descibe tears and water. A very deep and sweet write.
KEEP WRITING
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Re: Diamonds
(User Rating: 1 ) by slogan on
Thursday, 6th April 2006 @ 12:13:16 AM AEST (User
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good job...jh |
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Re: Diamonds
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 6th April 2006 @ 05:07:24 PM AEST (User
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Right on Kimberlyn! I give you an A-. The minus is the typo; shouldn't "if you a called" be "if you are called"? I believe I caught a diamond of hope from my eye!
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Re: Diamonds
(User Rating: 1 ) by JGB on
Thursday, 6th April 2006 @ 08:00:36 PM AEST (User
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Kimberlynn,
I don't know what to say other than "It's great!"
Joanna |
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