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Your Imagination
Contributed by
fallendarkangel
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Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 12:42:15 AM in AEST
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Your Imagination
you thought you felt him
but it wasn't real
you thought you heard him
but that wasn't the deal
you can think all you want
he is just a made up lie
you can think what you must
but the truth will not die
he is no longer in of your considerations,
he's just part of your imagination
you figured you had him
but it all wasn't true
you figured you needed him
but it all wasn't you
you can calculate all you want
he is just an illusion
you can calculate what you must
but the truth is your confusion
he is no longer in any of your equations,
he just part of your imagination
you hoped he loved you
but were sadly mistaken
you hoped he wanted you
but you were badly forsaken
you can wish all you want
but you were deceived
you can wish what you must
but your pain is not relieved
he is no longer in any of your expectations,
he just part of your imagination
you altered your life around him
but were pained to the heart
you altered your soul to suit him
but were ravishly torn apart
you can change all you want
but he will never be the same
you can change what you must
but its you who will always take the blame
he is and will no longer be in any of your transformations,
he'll forever be a part of your dillusional imagination
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Re: Your Imagination
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by PGreene on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 01:45:44 AM AEST
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| i loved this line "but the truth is your confusion" but i felt like the rest of the poem was far too repetitive. U have some great ideas though! |
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Re: Your Imagination
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by drtylilsecret on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 02:12:48 AM AEST
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very nicely written, but since the whole topic was him just being a part of your imagination, wouldn't that mean that you were never really there either, not only him? i guess i'm overanalyzing, but i was just wondering. still, good write.
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Re: Your Imagination
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by TheSpiritx on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 08:56:01 PM AEST
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Hey fallen.
I think the repetition in here drives the poem... your topic is one that can be afforded repetition and your poem is finely structured to handle it.
In fact, this would probably make a good song, if you're into doing that at all - definitely worth a shot.
In any case, it was a good read... not too heavy in expression and so I wasn't bogged down... it allowed a bit of free thought over the topic instead of forcing a certain perspective one way or another.
TS |
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