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Write Of Passage
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 08:00:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
fictional
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The moon is cast into the heavens By strong arms of old oak trees A fire crackles softly Sparks die out upon a breeze
He places calloused fingers Carefully upon the strings And a weathered old guitar Softly soon begins to sing
He plays out into the night For the stars alone to hear He plays of days gone by And of loved ones once held dear
They twinkle their approval And they seem to ask for more His fingers begin bleeding Growing stiff and growing sore
He plays on through out the night Every song he can recall His passion overwhelms them And the stars begin to fall
His fires nearly gone now This is his final act He feeds the embers his guitar As his soul is welcomed back
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Nazmythian
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2006-04-23 20:00:44] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 08:14:41 PM AEST (User
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Oh Noooooooo...Not the guitar!!!
This was a most beautiful sight and sound to behold....UNTIL the guitar was gone. I was there with him all the time, listening....and he thought it was only the stars hearing him.. Thank you for sharing this... I enjoyed it immensely.
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Adelle on
Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 08:29:24 PM AEST (User
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the coolest poem ever!!! |
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 08:42:04 PM AEST (User
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I loved this. Im sure Im way off base but this reminds me of a cowboy sitting by a fire on a mountain side, playing and thinking. He may be there alone but the universe and his memories are near him. Anyway this was a delight to read as always. Thanks for sharing.
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 09:09:34 PM AEST (User
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As I started to read this I couldn't get "Turn the Page" out of my head.
I don't know if it was the title or the content, but Seger is still floating around
somewhere . . .
ahem! I love the story telling in this nazzy. And it is done so gently and softly.
I would've liked to have met him. [or perhaps, in a way, we all did, yeah?]
Accomplished. That's what I get from this.
Well done, Scotty. [all of it.]
~Breezy
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Keilantra on
Monday, 24th April 2006 @ 05:44:14 PM AEST (User
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this is actually the most beautifulpoem i have read on this site. it written perfectly and you talent shines here lilke the stars in your poem. I love this becuase of how mysterious the charecter is.Why is he playing? Why does he bleed for his music? WOW WOW WOW. i really really like this! - lixa |
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 26th April 2006 @ 05:31:59 PM AEST (User
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Whoa now, that's an interesting piece. I like the sense of what one might term being pulled away from all sanity by the Muse. That's an intriguing concept.
Nicely done!
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 29th April 2006 @ 11:14:28 AM AEST (User
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WOW!
I can easily say that this is one of my favorite works which you have written. First of all I feel a personal connection with your subject, the guitarist. Writing away, or in his case playing away pains, and stains, of old love. Giving people a broken heart hoping than can mend it. WOW! this is just brilliant! Keep em coming Scott.
I am glad to see you posting regularly again. The three weeks or so when you paused there was something missing on YPDC, and then you made such an amazing return with the Slide Cotrelle work and the transfer from Slide to Nazzy as seen here was flawless!
GREAT JOB MY FRIEND!
SCM |
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Lilly-Quill on
Sunday, 30th April 2006 @ 06:17:56 PM AEST (User
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Ingeniously constructed, this has to be a winner in a category all it’s own. Exulting with untold passion, play on there guitarist, indeed play on!
A most uniquely and inspiring muse; much appreciated, for such write~!
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by candysears on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 08:09:42 PM AEST (User
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This is beautiful...I love it...Brilliance reveals....
God Bless! |
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 3rd May 2006 @ 07:22:22 AM AEST (User
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~*Scott*~
You know what I like so much about ur writes other than they are absolutely remarkable is that they are clear for one to understand. They aren't complicated and one does not need to look in a dictionary for those complicated words not often used.
An outstanding and very well penned write. Thank you so much for sharing it with us.
*warm huggers*
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Write Of Passage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Willofree on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 02:49:02 PM AEST (User
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Naz,
Beautifully written, with great imagery, yet with a lonely and sad feeling. This his final goodbye. The guitar a precious instrument to be creamated, so that it may soar heaven word with his soul.
A wonderful piece, Naz
Will |
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