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@#$#%&^$#&*&%$#....!!??!!......thank you
Contributed by
diablohate
on
Wednesday, 26th April 2006 @ 02:26:55 AM in AEST
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look inside my dorment eyes
to see a broken down slave
that is a pity to watch
but still you laugh
i point the gun
to the focus of life
and pull the trigger
only to hear a click
i had my chance
but i didn't prepare
and now i'm stuck
with all your lies
torn apart from my safety
and thrown down apon the street
for the punishment
of tring to be free
you trapt me in a cage
and showed me to the world
so that all can laugh
at the failure i am
the reason for logic
is based around rules
that we made up
to trap us in our mind
we share these emotions
but never imagined
that the reason for living
is of love and the lust
touch you apon your skin
and tell you it is safe
to give it all up
just for a single lay
but the problem dosen't stop
it just keeps getting worse
and the more we try
more traps are laid
we have never met
we've only talked
we met each other
and the truth is revealed
we are nothing alike
we're both just human
but we do have a link
one of us has a key
so we battle it out
and look past the bad
for the truth is ugly
but love will set us free
then i wake from my dream
and get back to the fact
that the life i once lived
was nothing but a lie
so i take my key
and i hold it tight
put it close to my head
and i finish the job
..........laugh at me now.......but you're still locked in a cage........without a key......
this is a poem for you...(the people without a key and who gets laughed at all the time......stay strong...because every ones gets laughed at
and no one likes it......sad to think that "a joke can kill"....do u really want that....to know that you helped kill someone....DEPRESSION is no joke.)
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Re: @#$#%&^$#&*&%$#....!!??!!......thank you
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 26th April 2006 @ 04:18:55 AM AEST
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I'll be the first to agree that depression is no joke.
there is medication out there that can do wonders for a troubled mind. I know 'cause I've been on Zoloft for over six years. It's a God send for me.
whoever it is that laughs at you are the ones with the problem. May God have mercy!
huggs, prayer,
emy
Great writing altho it's sad that there are people out there just waiting to send another off the deep end.
Hang tuff 'cause there are decent folks that understand and care. |
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Re: @#$#%&^$#&*&%$#....!!??!!......thank you
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 26th April 2006 @ 09:46:47 AM AEST
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I know how you feel.
Two things I would change: your name, diablohate, I almost did not read this poem because of that; we have enough haters on this site then you should work on having a good beat structure to your poems; this poem was great just the way it is though. You have a big heart. ( Change the title of your poem too ) Thanks for writing this. |
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Re: @#$#%&^$#&*&%$#....!!??!!......thank you
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 26th April 2006 @ 04:53:07 PM AEST
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Okay...you asked I believed for some comments in the forum. Not the wishy-washy kind. You know the meaning and point you were trying to make is great. Your comments at the end......made me kind of like you. Hee Hee......What I would work on....your spelling. Nothing turns me off more than constant misspelled words. One or two typos ....ok....but use spell check or look the words up to make sure you are using the correct spelling. I'm 41 been writing poetry for over 30 years and I still look stuff up. You can never learn too much.
You're right, depression is No Joke. I've suffered for years.....I started writing as a way to vent those periods of anger and depression....I still do. Writing can be great therapy.
Peace, Laura |
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