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You're empty now
Contributed by
somnium
on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 05:57:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Eat your soul and savour
Every sweet mouthful
I enjoy
You're empty now
Drink your mind
Through a straw
Like a glass of juice
You're empty now
Make a soup of
Your so-called
Innocence- Not enough for one bowl
You're empty now
Take your organs
And make a stew
Serve to friends and relatives
You're empty now
And your heart
How it entices me
Hypnotises me
And implores me
To take it from your breast
And swallow it whole
And digest every emotion you
Have felt in your little
Life
So I do and
You're just a shell
Void and pointless
Shell of she
Who used to occupy some
Wasted space on earth
And guess what...
You're empty now
Copyright ©
somnium
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2006-05-06 05:57:07]
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Re: You're empty now
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by vangelious on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 06:04:06 AM AEST
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| He puts the lotion on the skin or else he gets the hose again! |
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Re: You're empty now
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by purplestary on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 11:40:57 AM AEST
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| wow...very interesting write. ...i like it..lol..nice job. |
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Re: You're empty now
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by Coral on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 09:55:55 PM AEST
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very interesting write...
loved the fact that the rhymes were crisp and not jaded. keep up the good work
:)
hugs,
VaLeRiE |
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Re: You're empty now
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by Keilantra on
Sunday, 7th May 2006 @ 01:30:07 PM AEST
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nice write. it was very interesting. a bit caniblistic (how DO you spell that word?) but nice. the rhyming wasnt forced and niether was the flow. its got a lightness to it (even in the darkness lol) . good job.
x*x ~kei |
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