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Young, Dumb, and Apathetic
Contributed by
PoeticHybrid
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Thursday, 11th May 2006 @ 11:38:00 PM in AEST
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Young, dumb, and apathetic
Nothing natural, all synthetic
deals with people unsympathetic
How utterly poetic
You see, this young man
Really has no plan
From the time his story began,
He was destined to waste this life span.
Try as he might
to put up a fight,
nothing turns out right
so he sits with no light
There he reflects
The problems he corrects
The things he regrets
and people he protects
He wants to be free
and find tranquility,
end the futility
by any means necessary
The needle breaks his skin
allowing the flow of drugs in
To ignore his demons within
Allowing him to be in a state of Zen
After the masquerade
The effects start to fade
And he feels betrayed
So he reaches for the blade
The blood flows red
as it covers his bed
bleeding out his dread
and leaving him dead
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Re: Young, Dumb, and Apathetic
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by Mild_Tempest on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 12:21:02 AM AEST
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| Wow, that's some intense rhyming. Way to go. I see where you're going with this. |
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Re: Young, Dumb, and Apathetic
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by Aeris030388 on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 02:47:26 AM AEST
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The ryhming is really good. Such a sad ending though...
-Roxanne. |
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Re: Young, Dumb, and Apathetic
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by EddieDean on
Thursday, 18th May 2006 @ 08:26:50 PM AEST
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| Wow, just......wow. Great work man, sad ending though. But, in life, very few of us actually have happy endings.... |
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Re: Young, Dumb, and Apathetic
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by one-curly-fry on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 05:35:24 AM AEST
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good story poem - and again with the four line rhyming structure which is impressively done in this poem.
I've really been enjoying going over your work.
- Tim |
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