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Breaking Point
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 11:05:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Past the point
of no return
I bend
I bend
I break
Dreams all give
a final bow
It's more
than I
can take
Price of hope
was oh so high
I paid
the bitter
cost
Epic battle
fought for love
I came
I saw
I lost
L. Carling c2006
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
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2006-05-15 11:05:46]
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Re: Breaking Point
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by flamingblade on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 11:36:57 AM AEST
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kinda short
but i get the point
good job |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 11:46:38 AM AEST
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Pain and desolution, sadness all wrapped into this short and powerful piece.
I really feel this Larry, hang on. |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by MuCho_AmOr on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 12:28:05 PM AEST
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| Oh my goodness! I love it. I'm not even one hundred percent sure why. But there is something about it that is just so beautiful that it just makes me love it. Maybe I'm too over dramatic. |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 12:52:03 PM AEST
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The presentation of thought in thought lines of one to three words so visually displayed makes brevity an ally, not only to the giver of this poem, but also the recipient!
I was really grabbed by the double "bend" in the first verse, told me "It's not that I didn't try and try again!"
This is a word master's poem.
wabl
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Re: Breaking Point
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by ever1der on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 02:01:38 PM AEST
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| There are a lot of really good poets on this site, but it's no secret that I come here day after day mainly to read you..I wait and wait and wait... then I get this giving up *****. Some woman I suppose....Well damn it larry..forget love and write about autumn leaves or your new grandchild or something. Frankly, I'm tired of the whining. But I love your poetry........ |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by shelby on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 02:17:43 PM AEST
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hope all is well with you. very sad
Michelle |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by ever1der on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 02:45:33 PM AEST
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sorry for that rude comment...things are not so hot here
and I've missed your poetry. missed our chats too.. when I could vent about stuff... guesss I just did, LOL. again, I'm sorry. (((((((( larry))))))) |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 03:33:08 PM AEST
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I am saddened by this read, but not sorry you wrote it. Hang in there, Larry.... It can only get better...
Jenni |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 03:42:59 PM AEST
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Oh Gosh, Larry.
You are one heck of a writer, you twist the words in such away that everyone can feel the pain.
That end stanza particularly hit hard, the last three lines...wow.
Good write, I am just very sad that you are so down.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by His_Infernal_Majesty on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 08:04:32 PM AEST
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| Now thats a poem, I thought this was great Iactually wish I wrote this lol |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 07:51:47 AM AEST
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Always amazing
chin up Larry
tomorrow is another day
......Mike |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 12:52:19 PM AEST
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| Awww the breaking point. Something I think all of us can relate to. As always your writes are heartfelt. Peace, Laura |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 07:42:34 AM AEST
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Dearest Larry~
Your writes are always heartfelt my dear friend. Chin up sweet guy it'll get better I know it will. Keeping writing down ur emotions for it helps heal ones heart.
May ur days ahead be much brighter dearest ~*Larry*~
*huge hugs*
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by Drapes on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 08:46:30 PM AEST
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Oooh, I really like this! It had a good flow. Nice job!
-Drapes |
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Re: Breaking Point
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by sweetangeluk on
Saturday, 31st March 2007 @ 01:56:53 PM AEST
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Heartbreaking write that tore at my heart. Excellent write
Love Angelxx |
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