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REDUNDANT
Contributed by
Davinah
on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 04:21:51 AM in AEST
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I turned my back on you
and I hope my silence hurts like hell.
Yes, this is revenge for all you put me through.
The ignorance, the indifference and the lies you tell.
For all my good intentions withered
As I watched you turn out to be weak and blind
Lost in the centre of your pathetic universe
Theres nothing there for me to find.
Ive got enough darkness of my own
Without inhaling your despair
I dont need you stealing from my strength
My comfort I do not wish to share
I hope you like your newfound loneliness
Now Im no longer there to make you ache
To confront you with your weaknesses
For I was too much for you to take.
Copyright ©
Davinah
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2006-05-16 04:21:51]
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Re: REDUNDANT
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by sadaddy on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 05:07:38 AM AEST
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Davinah, this was a wonderful way of expressing your emotions. Very well written. Take care and be good.
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Re: REDUNDANT
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by little_genna on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 07:54:26 AM AEST
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this is very angry but a good way of expressing it. i wish sometimes i would bother to pick up a pen when im angry rather than shouting at people. but hey
this poem is amazing in its content, i could hear my ex shouting this at me. but he loves me enough to want to stay with me.
we all have our weaknesses but some people just dont help themselves!
actually i dont just like this poem i love it! |
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Re: REDUNDANT
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by Jackee_line on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 08:11:34 AM AEST
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| Well done, well expressed |
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Re: REDUNDANT
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by DamentedSuicide on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 09:50:16 AM AEST
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stutters to think i how i should put this comment, i loved the poem the feeling in it is amazing and so heart felt, your have a great way of showing your emotions in what you write, absolutley amazing
*sam* |
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Re: REDUNDANT
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by Lo2681 on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 01:32:15 AM AEST
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Davinah~
This is a beautiful piece. It is honest and deep. I like that about it. Good for you having the courage to stand up and make someone pay for their ignorance towards your feelings. It's a quality a lot of people lack or take years to do.:) Excellent work.
~Lo |
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Re: REDUNDANT
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by samwrue on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 04:30:59 PM AEST
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| i like it a lot, very good job |
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Re: REDUNDANT
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 30th May 2006 @ 03:50:19 PM AEST
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| Deep Innervision of emotional torture..... |
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Re: REDUNDANT
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by secretwind on
Wednesday, 31st May 2006 @ 04:21:34 PM AEST
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"I've got enough darknes of my own
without inhaling your despair"
that line of your flow is soooooooooo
beautiful. |
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Re: REDUNDANT
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 04:20:31 AM AEST
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GREAT HATE! ..fanatical maticulous rhymes-
last stanza's best ~ and with a bit of haughtiness..lol
you possess a wicked genius!
B |
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