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Killing you, Killing me
Contributed by
girlg0newrong
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Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 04:40:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
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In a different time, It was a different place
you were so numb, I had tears on my face
both so high, both so low
out of our heads, with no where to go
Our darkness set us free
but the love was killing you, killing me
It was a brighter day, or so it seemed
we just couldn't see the rain falling all around our feet
with your shallow breath, with your head on my chest
and your hand slowly losing it's grip to mine
you do this to survive
to escape your pain and hide
but how long can you run till you run outta breath
and you have to steal mine?
shooting for your synthetic stars
while I risk reaching out to where you are
all this time I've been trying so hard
to pull you up without falling further down myself
Once the darkness set us free
but the love was killing you, killing me
I'm losing you but I'm saving myself
you've pulled every string that I had left
now there's nothing left for you to do
caue I've got nothing left for you to hold on to
Once the darkness set us free
but the love was killing you, killing me
Once the darkness set us free
I can't help but think I coulda saved you now, and that kills me.
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by wizard on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 06:25:23 AM AEST
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nicely done...sounds like you've released your demons...best of luck in that.
i love this line:
"shooting for your synthetic stars"
soberly yours,
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by Aquaelius on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 06:31:01 AM AEST
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I love that reaccurent line... very strong.
Kinda reminds me of that song, "I think we're alone now." Kinda, if it were darker. But very good, thanks for sharing.
Aq. |
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by Aquaelius on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 06:40:14 AM AEST
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I love that reaccurent line... very strong.
Kinda reminds me of that song, "I think we're alone now." Kinda, if it were darker. But very good, thanks for sharing.
Aq. |
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by Davinah on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 09:02:23 AM AEST
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Very nice, touching poem.
You shouldn't blame yourself. You cannot save someone else. They either save themselves or they don't.
You saved yourself, right?
All the best to you!
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by ever1der on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 10:57:56 AM AEST
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| filled with feeling..and heart; nice write even though sad. |
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by Kevin on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 10:24:00 PM AEST
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This was an excellent poem. Very sad and tragic, i feel for you hun. Love is a sticky situation and you're poem described it's "horrors" quite nicely ;-)
-Kevin |
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Monday, 22nd May 2006 @ 06:53:44 AM AEST
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incredible and heart wrenching. well done.
Avalanche XoXo. |
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 1st October 2006 @ 11:46:06 PM AEST
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..it's all I can do to breathe. . .
your honesty is brutal.. and splendid as well, the work:
the title and it's repetition throughout..
or the 4th stanza (worthy enough on it's own) by far - perhaps prior to the 7th..lol
very well written-
*k.. I'm done*
B
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 7th November 2006 @ 08:44:31 AM AEST
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Amazing an d beautifully sad.. This was an amazing poem..
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Killing you, Killing me
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by NDean on
Friday, 8th December 2006 @ 05:51:00 PM AEST
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Fantastic poem. So emotional in its strange subtle ephasis.... i know what I mean...
COOL POEM
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