|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
The Emotional Edge
Contributed by
Tanna
on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 12:32:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
|
Im not enough to hold ones interest long
Not sure how, or why, or even where I belong
The feeling of failure is overwhelmingly strong
Can I bend before I break?
Self pity and recrimination have taken hold
Ironic, the way my days unfold
Its amazing to see, a sight to behold
Apprehensive, I start to shake.
Ive torn down walls that I have built
Walked through life haunted by guilt
Ive withdrawn and felt my soul wilt
How many more mistakes can I make?
A teardrop forms in the corner of my eye
I swore to myself I wouldnt cry
Ill straighten my spine and continue to try
How much more can one heart take?
Needing to discover my own worth
To come into my own, make my mark on this earth
36 years wasted away, I chuckle with mirth
Makes even a madwoman quake..
Premonition, trepidation, both crawl up my back
I sit for an eternity, waiting for the attack
The world around me slowly turns black
But for now, I must stay awake.
Copyright ©
Tanna
... [
2006-05-21 00:32:46]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: The Emotional Edge
(User Rating: 1 )
by wizard on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 01:15:02 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
wow...i thought this was a great write. you've done well with the rhyming (i'm a big fan of the a,a,a,b style, as indicated by several of my writes). it can be difficult not to sound forced in rhyme with this style, and you've pulled that of nicely.
and as for emotion, the torment comes through nicely...i can feel this scream with misery.
nicely done!
wiz |
|
|
Re: The Emotional Edge
(User Rating: 1 )
by Mystik on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 02:06:10 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| That was incredibly beautiful. Your words were deep and felt strong. |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Site Help
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
