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The Stage
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 06:29:09 PM in AEST
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...so, I called up a friend and for an hour and a half, I confessed everything about myself. I said everything I had ever wanted to say to anybody, and now, I am fighting to let the real me show. I think it's about time I stopped feeling sorry for myself.
Anyway, this is 'The Stage'
*******
Such a low bow...
Perhaps my tears will touch the floor,
And maybe I will cry some more,
While I'm low enough so you can't see...
Throw roses so my skin will bleed,
The pretty red will match my scars,
The thorns will pierce, you'll stand, applaud,
And I'll smile like the actress I portray.
Give the crowd a final wave,
And turn from their adoring eyes,
They cannot see through my disguise,
They're blinded by the theatre lights...
I'm deafened by demanding cries,
Calling for another encore,
I give my all, they still want more,
I act for them, a lie upon a stage.
A smile plastered on my face,
I take the praise and hold it near,
And try to fight the instant fear,
That they will see the real pain,
See the minute lines of strain,
Across my grossly made-up face,
Showing feelings which have no place,
While I'm acting life away.
Copyright ©
lostinmyself
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2006-05-21 18:29:09]
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Re: The Stage
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by Keilantra on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 07:49:44 PM AEST
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i like the first stanza the best. it was nicely done.
xXx
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Re: The Stage
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by wizard on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 09:47:20 PM AEST
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this is truly a great write...it seems we are all just putting on our best performance for the audience that is the world, hoping to get rave reviews. some will say this is not the case, but i think they are mistaken.
very nicely done!!
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Re: The Stage
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 10:26:16 PM AEST
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Wow, hun. This was incredible. Yes, it is true, I suppose some of
us put on a mask and play a part so that the world will accept us. BUT
I firmly believe, (be it naive or not) that there are many genuine hearts
out there who would give you whatever they had to give that would bring
you comfort. You just need to look for them and trust that you'll recognize
it when you see it. A soft and gentle soul doesn't usually flit in and out of
your life. They are steadfast. Loyal. Caring.
But in this piece, you have described yourself as someone who is going thru
the motions in order to please the masses. Not necessary, sweets. You
are truly one of the beautiful people. Your heart is an open book, my dear.
Who could not love the real you? Sometimes I think sadness from within
comes from hiding it for so long. We all need to cry every once in while.
We all need to be able to say, I need ! . There is no shame in seeking
comfort. I feel incredibly sorry for those that can't. Untold pain and
loneliness lie in wait . . .
wonderfully written this piece.
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Re: The Stage
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by Lo2681 on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 11:09:41 PM AEST
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Wow I am happy for you. It isnt a good feeling to feel that you are living to please other people...and even if it isnt what people want to hear sometimes you have to tell them the truth....why should you carry pain around that isn't yours?
~Lo |
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Re: The Stage
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by Sagefairy on
Monday, 22nd May 2006 @ 11:53:09 AM AEST
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Philly, this is beautiful and so *you*; although you are in the midst of much change. A bit it reminds me of a poem I had written, because I too, pretend at times. But this speaks to the strain inside you from feeling you have to wear that mask. An excellent write, from my point of view, even if it's never finished.
*hugs* J. |
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Re: The Stage
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 22nd May 2006 @ 10:49:16 PM AEST
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It matters not, that the practical application of the lines has passed, what matters most is the moment captured within them ... and in that moment ... hun ... with these words ... you shine and you do so brilliantly !!!
Nazzy ~
( feeling compelled to state also that if this is your idea of an unfinished poem ... may all of mine henceforth ... remain undone in such a manner ) |
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Re: The Stage
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 02:18:44 PM AEST
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What I find most amazing here is that...hopefully..I have seen a little behind the disguise, and I don't think its so bad if you let it show....as a matter of fact, it's wonderful!
...and trust me you don't own the market on being silly!!! |
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Re: The Stage
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 05:27:27 PM AEST
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Forget your author's note,most emotional poetry is based on feeling sorry for ourselves.That's just opening up.I thought this was a great poem,
Den |
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Re: The Stage
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by Baronhawk on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 12:19:47 PM AEST
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Shakespear once penned that all life is a stage and we are all players upon it. In many ways this is true and indeed so is your write herein. I will not deign to know the story behind this but I must express the impression that I got from this here write. It is unfortunate that life often requires us to wear a mask and hide behind our acts. Life is indeed a constant tussle between honesty and expediency. I too am an actor upon my own stage and I sort of get what a tiring experience it is to continue putting on that heavy make-up and to always dance to the popular tunes. I find your write an apt description of the often impossible task we all carry on in the face of society, peer pressure and expectations. I might have read this wrong but that is my take. I don't know, it is tempting for me to tell you just to be yourself but I know all too well that life has many pitfalls and I too struggle with the real me and what the world wants to see. So all I can say is that we must all do our best I guess.
"...I wear a mask upon my face... mostly to hide from others.... but oftimes to hide from myself..." |
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Re: The Stage
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 07:32:26 PM AEST
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Truly beautiful in it's poetic nature, your writing brings comfort to my soul phill.
Perhaps i knew u in another life time
when u weren't acting. And i was free
from the scars of abuse. Lovely and
brilliant as always.
((((Phill))))
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Re: The Stage
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by Ruby2sdy on
Friday, 2nd June 2006 @ 04:03:44 AM AEST
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It's true, we all put on a mask, a facde, if you like, being on 'the stage' makes me realise who I really am, and outlets like that are amazing, poetry is perhaps one of the best forms of release... and we're allowed to be self pitying occassionally!
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Re: The Stage
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 2nd June 2006 @ 10:29:05 PM AEST
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I can only offer this:
NEVER find it worthy within yourself to make glad sentiments for only, some self affirmation..
People who call themselves friends, are because of who YOU are..
nice work-
B |
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