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Promiscuity--clean version
Contributed by
Caged Soul
on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 02:10:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Women, why have you let your pride go?
Allowing him to violate you in ways unfathomable so.
Thinking you are modern womenindependent and free,
Saying yes to any random him and he.
Please elevate yourselves from this mental apostasy.
You aint nothing but a reincarnation of an ancient reiteration,
selling your souls for temporary physical gratification.
In the process destroying the essence of your very existence,
Now you are an empty vessel without no substance.
Longing to be filled in the only way they know how.
With shame I look at my brothersbig headed,
Professing to be MENtheir manliness in slick words embedded.
The way they prove their masculinity needs some desperate rethinking
The amount of thug love among these women they be distributing.
The quantity of those found abundantly.
Why dont these so called men step up and handle their business?
Like little boys they be playingtheir destinies choosing to dismiss.
They take that girls innocence and dignity with no hesitation,
While their skilful avoidance of child support demands vigorous admiration.
Proficient in areas of life of surplus triviality.
Copyright ©
Caged Soul
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2006-05-23 02:10:42]
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Re: Promiscuity--clean version
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 03:19:33 AM AEST
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Hear, hear. This is the truth all right. I like the way it's written, with a marked attention to musical and alliterative combinations. You have a fine English style that way.
I do think the "him and he" bit of the first stanza is a little "click-clack", i.e. it sounds below the caliber of language of the rest of it. Well done, however.
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Re: Promiscuity--clean version
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by Whisper on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 03:34:27 PM AEST
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Bravo Excellent Write. From a man's point of veiw is very refreshing . For there are only a few that think as you.
Thank you for speaking up perhap others will learn too.
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