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Life Lessons
Contributed by
spike
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Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 07:11:24 AM in AEST
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Anne Geddes: Clam Shell Baby
'For everything there is a season, And a time for every matter under heaven: A time to be born, and a time to die': Ecclesiastes 3: 1-8
'It takes a lot to laugh, it takes a train to cry' Bob Dylan
And so it came upon me,
To cast all things aside
And go and find the essence
Of what I am inside
I took the form of fishes, and
Swam the deepest sea
But all I found was darkness,
Most of it in me
I dressed myself in feathers,
And arced across the sky
But the sparrows whistled sweetly
That sadness cannot fly
So I took on claws and muscle,
And tunnelled through the earth
And lost among the catacombs
Felt all the pain of birth
Crawling back to sunlight,
Naked and unnamed
I whispered to the heart of things,
the beat of life untamed
I sang the song of ages, and
Danced the clouds to weep
Then exhausted and elated,
Gave myself to sleep.
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 08:24:27 AM AEST
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*smiles*
First of all, I love Anne Geddes work (though, what is most wonderful about it often gets losts in the shuffle of mass marketing, I think). I imagine the majority would say they like it, you know? I just can't help wonder if we all do for the same reason. It's an interesting sort of thing to ponder, really.
And now... regarding your piece.... I love it. I know - that's a terribly common thing to say, but I do. Moreover, I love bits of it, the essence of it, the presentation of it, the result of it (the feeling it left me with)... the all of it. (See? told you I love it! Which is why I feel quite right in dropping an overly common remark like that on it. *wink*)
I absolutely adore that this opens with "And so...". In its own way, that, in and of itself, is really quite wonderful. The journey, too, is wonderful... it speaks of reflection and renewal and tells of a process that is essential but so often unachieved. Regardless of whether you wholly intended to convey a very personal message here or whether you had simply hoped to write a fine poem, I am convinced that a heart is singing here. And it's song, is quite lovely.
Keep it comin', Spike -
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 08:28:38 AM AEST
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Oh man, Spike, I think you done graduated with honors giving this valedictorian"s address to life's lessons! I love reading genius.
wabl
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Caged Soul on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 09:12:33 AM AEST
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wow, this is so cool. It had a really beautiful presence, something not many poems/poets can represent in a convincing way, like you did.
Keep it up.
Ash~ |
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Re: Life Lessons
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by ever1der on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 10:32:33 AM AEST
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| This is absolutely wonderful ... probably the best thing I've read..not just today but any day. I think I'll recommend it...once again, truly a great read. |
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Remi on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 02:05:01 PM AEST
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| lovely write this is a really nice poem |
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Re: Life Lessons
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by jerseysue on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 02:12:36 PM AEST
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| That is so beautiful Spike, I could never write anything as touching and emotional as this. Thank you Sue xx |
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 11:49:46 PM AEST
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Spike~
An extraordinary, remarkable and brilliantly penned masterpiece you have penned for us here. Gosh I don't know what to say. This is one of the best poems I have ever come across. A truly gifted and talented poet whom masters such beautiful poetic verses everytime. Hats off to ya Aussie :-)
warm huggers & aussie smiles,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 08:09:43 AM AEST
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I dunno how you do it, this is another gem.
Got me on the train of buddhist thought this one nothing is permanent, live for the now etc.
You (or someone) really should be publishing this stuff.
J |
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 06:06:00 PM AEST
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I am soooo impressed with this!!!
It tells a wonderful story of life and living, and yet the bottom line is that it is so darn entertaining!!!!
rereads.......yeah.... |
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 04:37:20 AM AEST
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I love the way you have brilliantly penned a poem about life in such short fashion. You say volumes with remarkable briefness. An awesome poem!!!
Thank you,
Tim |
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 10:57:24 AM AEST
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Just catching up on some reading,you're on fire Spike.This is superb.No need for screams mate,you get the candy everytime as far as I'm concerned,
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Re: Life Lessons
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by OzChick on
Tuesday, 6th June 2006 @ 04:00:13 AM AEST
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This has an ethereal feel to it that I really like. This is moving with its depth of insight. Brilliant.
~Jenny~ |
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Re: Life Lessons
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 11th June 2006 @ 10:56:53 PM AEST
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This I think, is one of my favourite poems I've ever read...Something in it just resonates with me, and rather loudly at that...Wow. I really like this Spike. These two lines:
I took the form of fishes and swam the deepest sea
But all I found was darkness, most of it in me
Yeah.
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Re: Life Lessons
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by silent on
Wednesday, 16th August 2006 @ 09:10:00 AM AEST
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I love it, especially "That sadness cannot fly
So I took on claws and muscle,
And tunnelled through the earth"
Gives me more enthusiasm to trudge through those sheep, well done.
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Re: Life Lessons
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by Lionel on
Monday, 21st August 2006 @ 10:37:53 PM AEST
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Terriffic poem Spike.
To sleep, and still in question,
this turmoil down deep inside:
the end for which I'm searching,
while my sin I seek to hide.
To sleep, but none the wiser,
of this flesh and soul to tell;
If heaven be it's destination,
or alas, consignment - hell.
See - you inspired me to add a few lines of my own - Though, don't know if they fit or not.
You are an excellent poet. ( I think I've already told you that )
God bless
Lionel
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