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...~*An Empty Heart*~...
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 07:55:48 PM in AEST
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The moon shuffles across the sky
Farewelling the sun into the dusk
Wild flowers sway to a gentle breeze
Their transcending scent like musk
With glass thoughts I stare
Deep into my heart's mirror
Do I dare to look any further
As emptiness makes me quiver
I have felt like this for long
How hard it is to try to forget
A happy memory once lived
Is now full of deep regret
Glass clouds hover in the night
Lightning addresses the sky
I'm encompassed by empty thoughts
As life slowly slips on by...
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Re: ...~*An Empty Heart*~...
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 09:01:33 PM AEST
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" As Life Slowly Slips On By " wow, i felt that
u do write a powerful poem and convey very revealing emotions. that is the magic in which i speak of about you. your poetry is beautiful because it is of the truest of hearts . . .
((((Sue))))
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 09:33:35 PM AEST
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very saddening this was...i loved this completely. i can relate to your feelings in this (who couldn't). very nicely done!!
my motto is 'it can always be worse', so keep that in mind and don't stay down long. of course, conversely...it can always be better, but that's up to the individual to make happen.
nice write,
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by candysears on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 10:32:21 PM AEST
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This is nicely written,but very sad...I can feel all the emotion you put into this write..
Very,very good..
But do bounce back soon...
God Bless!
carolyn
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 11:04:08 PM AEST
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Aw Susie Q~
I'm so sorry you are in this "place" hun. Such a sad and
weary existence to endure. To feel this kind of pain and
sorrow is to be in everlasting torture. Good days are
forthcoming sweet girl.
*smacks self for sounding so cliché*
but 'tis true. In the darkest of clouds you will always find
a silver lining. Believe it Susie.
*love 'n' hugs*
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 11:05:28 PM AEST
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a very sad and emotional piece.
well done
take care |
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 11:17:43 PM AEST
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Life for you, will NOT slip slowly on by!
You have far too much of it in you!
..and so, if I am not given a piece before you see fit.. well, then I will come and get it!
Truth in honesty..
Yes..
Billy |
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 11:46:41 PM AEST
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Oh My Dear Sweet Susie Q!
Your poem reminds me of a time when I thought my life was not only slipping by but completely over..........not so sweet friend. Give yourself much time, to find yourself. Make sure of who you are before you start another relationship. For me it took 10 years....but always be true to you!
This poem was exquisite with your feelings. A glass moment that can be blown again, or lay in chips forever..........you can make it happen, but only when you're ready.
Loved your words as always!
Warm love and hugs
Momconsue |
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 03:20:31 AM AEST
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So sad but well written. Hang tuff, my friend. You will get thru.
luv, huggs, prayer,
emy |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 08:41:11 AM AEST
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I love the glass thoughts and glass clouds, the way you've made everything seem so fragile and achieved it admirably.
Especially in the last stanza.
Glass clouds hover in the night
Lightning addresses the sky.
Gave me wonderful imagery of lightning shattering the clouds with the glass falling to earth like so many of our hopes and dreams.
Excellent.
J.
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by jujubee21 on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 08:42:32 AM AEST
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i can sympothize i have also felt this way
but just know that it always gets better
even if it seems like it takes forever
sometimes life just sucks |
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Re: ...~*An Empty Heart*~...
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 09:22:18 AM AEST
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| Such deep sad emotion in this piece Suzie Q. You have captured a feeling I have been feeling but have been unable to put to words. Write on girl......Mike |
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by NoSaint on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 10:01:58 AM AEST
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emptiness portrayed w/ such gentle beauty...
Shari |
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 10:02:59 PM AEST
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A very well-written poem...so full of emotions. But you are a strong woman, Sue....
Stay that way,,
Hugs
Jenni |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 11:29:37 PM AEST
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Sue this is beautiful, your inner self is showing your heart is on display and
your bridge of emotions are expanding
and reaching out 2 the reader. as usual
u have pened another magical moment
on these pages.
((((Sue))))
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Re: ...~*An Empty Heart*~...
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 06:05:53 PM AEST
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Oh sweet Lady!
I just happen to come across these heart-wrenchingly beautiful lines of yours.
You are hurting.
Blessed are the mourning and hurting, for they shall be comforted.
It is through suffering and pain we grow.
Call upon the Lord and He will sustain you.
Remember "Footprints in the Sand"
I experienced His carrying me when I was at my very end.
Be blessed abundantly
Elizabeth |
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by moses on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 02:20:32 PM AEST
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Beatiful imagery in this poem! So true, and perfect.
Not much I can say that hasn't been said before.
Keep up the good work.
Your fan/friend,
Moses |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th June 2006 @ 10:42:44 PM AEST
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I hear the voice of an angel crying in the heavens above i see words of saddness and i know where u have been and yet the magic of your soul has once again reedemed you and you will rise like the pheonix to live and conquer another day and another heart. beautiful just beautiful.
((((Sue))))
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by jerseysue on
Wednesday, 7th June 2006 @ 02:24:48 AM AEST
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| Your sadness comes out as deep expression. I wish I could write that way. Beautiful but sad, A lovely write. Sue x |
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by In_a_while on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 01:56:06 PM AEST
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I'm encompassed by empty thoughts
As life slowly slips on by...
Beautiful, it's wonderfully written. Such words and rhyme help the imagery swim into the mind's eye...
and the sorrow expressed is deeply affecting. I'm
happy to see you still producing these fine pieces of
poetry. I'll take care to read more!
buh bye for now and keep it up!
(tanx for comments also!)
dwayne |
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Re: ...~*An Empty Heart*~...
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by candysears on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 07:59:37 PM AEST
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Your writes always captures the eye..
The more you read the more you want to
read..I enjoyed this write tremedously...
God Bless! |
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Re: ...~*An Empty Heart*~...
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th June 2006 @ 02:42:03 PM AEST
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My....so very full of emotion!
Sad, almost sweet. Nostalgic and blue.
Very....very well done!!!! |
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by Lucid_Tides on
Tuesday, 27th June 2006 @ 11:49:31 PM AEST
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| I really like the words in this poem. Glass Clouds: Did you know that before time, our ozone and atmosphere was made of a chrystaline layer, 10 miles high? That is what it reminds me of. Amazing. great job. |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 16th November 2006 @ 08:57:16 AM AEST
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| Dam...this touches me in a way I can't even begin to express....hah! a poet without words........ |
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by myheartsvoice on
Friday, 2nd February 2007 @ 12:54:14 AM AEST
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This is most beautiflly captivating poetry you write. Such a lovely mix of the art and the craft equivielant to the heart and soul. Truly a most gifted and magnificent artist you are.
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